My FIRST EVER Fanfic n_n

[miklc]

Well I have been wanting to write a fanfic for a long time now. When I am older apart from working in animation, I would love to be a Fantasy Author. So I would be really really grateful for all your comments, good and bad. Tell me what you REALLY think, I know I am quite bad, but practise make perfect. Now due to school work I won't be able to add to this as regulary as some people do but please do keep checking back. Oh and I also have a kind of ruff idea where I want to go with this, but other than that nothing so anything could really happen (PS I will give this thread a proper name, when I actually think of one)

Prologue

The moonlight shone down brightly, on the calm surface of the water as the waves lapped gently against the seaweed drenched rocks. There she was perched upon one of these rocks, sitting deep in thought. He beatiful long hair hung down past her waist, flowing gently in the evening breeze. The lights of a far off ship, could just be made out on the horizon. Aboard that ship would be humans, creatures with two tails whom could not survive the wonders of the ocean. Suddenly this delicate creature broke into song. She sang of the wonders she had experianced, the pain she had caused and the furtures that lay ahead. Then with little hesitation she dived into the water. Resurfacing only once more, before returing to her watery domain.

So it is only the prologue, but I would love to here what you guys think of it

[scarletbubbles]

I like it - good work. And good for you that you want to become an author. I also want to become an author - I would love to write books or be a journalist. And your very right, practice makes perfect. I get better with each chapter I write for my stories.

Keep it up, I'm curious to see where you take this.

[miklc]

Thank you very much that means alot :-)

[ariel7angel]

YEah good story, im also writing my frist fanfic, so good for you - you should check my out too - Under the sea once again, its what my called!!!!

[miklc]

Well I know it has been quite along time since I wrote the Prolouge, but I have been really busy with school work and Disney On Ice , but not to worry I havn't left it, for those who would like to read the first chapter of my first fanfic. So here it is.......

Chapter 1

Excitment bubbled through the busy streets of Atlantica. King Triton's golden castle stood glorious and proud, above the rest of the city. Vibrant aquatic plants flowed gently in the crystal waters, as school's of fish frolicked to and fro peacefully. The many species provided an explosion of colour and beauty, anyone that was to witness such an alluring scene would be lost for words.

Yet today knowone could stop to watch such a glorious scene, it seemed. Their minds were focused on a prior engagement. Something so special, many thought it to be the most important event of the year. It was to week until the annual Coral Ball, that was to be held in Trition's castle, in celebration of the whole ocean. It was tradition, it always had been and it alwys would be.

Merpeople off all ages swam around hurringly, there was so much to prepare for. Adolescent mermaids fought over what to wear, while merman compitited against each other to see whom they could takeas thier date. All was panic and frustration for the older merpeople whom also took it upon themselves to do most of the preparation. That was the way it had been for generations.

"Girls, girls stop dis rif raf immediately. We have a concert to prepare for," demanded Triton's musical composer, Sebastian. Sebastian the crab was very proud of his royal title, yet it had occured to him that most of the time all he did was chase after Triton's own daughters.
"Oh but Sebastian how can we calm down? We've been waiting a whole year for this to arrive, isn't it so exciting?" laughed Alana, one of the King's beatiful daughter.

All together there were seven princesses, each gifted with harmonic voices. Yet the youngest of the sister had the most delightful voice.
"Arielle! Arielle! Where is dat girl?" Sebastian questionned. The problem was she always seemed to turn up late at the most annoying of times. "Trust dat girl, to turn up late one of di most important rehersals of her life," Sebastian sighed.

"I'm here," startled Sebastian turned around, Triton's youngest daughter was swimming towards him. Her beautiful red hair flowed in the water, as her stunning green tail shimmered in the water.
"Where exactly have you been, young lady. Late again," Sebastian questionned sternelly. He could act angrily on the outside, though he heart was jumping for joy on the inside. The rhersal could go on afterall. "If your Father knew you were late for another preformance he'd ..."
"Sebastian I'm here now, it won't happen again," Ariel promised, though Sebastian didn't seem to belive her.

[ariel7angel]

HEy i like short posts more than long ones anyways - i think it sounds great - good job, i cant wait to hear more!!!!!

[miklc]

I am really sorry that I havn't even finished Chapter 1 yet I have been so busy with school and everything else, I will really try and get it completed as soon as possible oh an thanks for any one's comments, they are well appreciated

[miklc]

Finally I got Chapter 1 completed it's kind of rubbish, but I would love to hear you're comments still please. I havn't yet got a title for my fanfic, but I will be adding one later on