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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 5, 2006 0:28:18 GMT -5
Hi this is my first Ariel fanfic so here it goes. Ariel looked out at the sea, she wished that she could go back. She did love Eric and her daughter Melody; but missed Flounder, her sisters, and most importantly her father. Ariel hadn't seen her dad for about a year, and knew that she had missed a bunch of her sisters and her dad's birthday's. "Ariel, darling, what's wrong?" Ariel had been so preoccupied with her thoughts that she had forgotten that Eric had entered the room. "Nothing, I'm just so tired." Ariel repiled faking a yawn. Hoping that Eric wouldn't see right through her. "Ariel we've been married for 16 years now, and I think I can figure out when your lieing." Eric said with a smirk. "Well it's just, I miss my dad and my sisters. I also miss flounder." Ariel said not looking into Eric's eyes. "Well, it's your lucky day. King Trition has invited you, me, and Melody to come and stay at his palace for a while. Your dad said he really missed you too." Ariel's whole face lit up and gave Eric a hug. She couln't wait to be with her father again.. Don't worry the forgotten friend is doming up soon.  |
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Post by ariel7angel on Dec 5, 2006 11:54:48 GMT -5
SOunds good, wow we must been thinking the same thing - with my fanfic "Under the sea once again" kind of has the same begin - which im going to go back to - you should check it out - keep writing, i cant wait to read more!!!
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 5, 2006 23:45:28 GMT -5
I read it! It's super!!! Keep reading mine please!! I look forward to figuring out who the "Stranger" is.
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 7, 2006 23:38:23 GMT -5
"Melody! Wait!" Ariel exclaimed speeding up to finnaly catch her daughters fin; but run straight inot an unsuspecting merman.
Ariel turned to help the mermand up after helping Melody, but he was gone.
"That's funny.."
Merman POV (about five min earlier)
"I'm so bored now adays." the merman complained as he was swimming along.
"No more adventures, no more excitement. Seems as if the only thing exciting will be the Neptune ball." The merman was so lost in his thoughts that a young mermaid ran head first into him.
"I'm so sorry sir." I looked up. There she was a ghost of my past, still flowing red hair. She had gotten a little older, but mermaids age beautifully so no wrinkles or anything. I was lucky my hair had fallen over my eyes so I could get out faster that a guppy swims from a shark.
Back to Ariel's (Main)
"Melody you've got to be more careful." Ariel scolded as she and Melody swam into the the palace.
"What did you do Melody?" asked Eric who had been haveing a great time learning all about life under the sea.
"Well, Melody wasn't careful and ran into a merman."
"On accident!" Melody chimed in hoping that her parents wouldn't ground her the whole time she would be in the sea.
Later on Ariels gave Melody a tour of her grotto.
"And this is where I spent most of my days dreaming of what life would be like on land." Ariel said showing Melody what was left of her collection.
"Hey who's that?"
Sorry to leave you with a cliffie, but for those of you hard-core TLM series fans you will remeber the Neptune ball and that will give you a clue to who the friend is...
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 8, 2006 23:04:34 GMT -5
I hope you all like it..
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 13, 2006 0:49:58 GMT -5
Sorry for not updatiing I have a cold... Hope I haven't let anyone down...
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 13, 2006 22:00:34 GMT -5
BTW
Ariel looked out of the top of her grotto, she could see a merman looking into the hole.
"Hey!" Ariel called out swimming as fast as her fins could carry her. The merman immediatly swam away.
"I wonder who that was?" Ariel quietly said to herself as she left the grotto with Melody.
Melody had inherited more than one of Ariel's trait, but the one she had definently gotten was the "Not obeying your father/mother" trait.
Melody snuck out to go look for some sand dollars, and to see Ursula's old evil lair. Melody had been swimming along untill she met a merman cowering behind a coral reef.
"Hi!" she said as she came up behind him. He ran and hid behind a rock.
"Why are you afraid? I won't hurt you. My name's Melody." Melody said calmly.
The merman came out from behind the rock. "Sorry, my friends ran off with out me. My name is Roe, you must be the grandaughter of king Triton." Roe said.
"What do you mean?" Melody asked.
"Well, my dad said that most Trition daughters/grandaughters have a tendency to not obey their curfew." Roe said with a grin spreading across his face.
LOl? I know Roe sounds a little weird but I like it..
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Post by tinababe7061 on Dec 14, 2006 9:20:32 GMT -5
sounds pretty good.
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Post by ariel7angel on Dec 14, 2006 11:10:14 GMT -5
I like it, but it kinds of jumps around a little too much for me, maybe just feel in somemore it would really help, other than that i really like it!!!!
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 14, 2006 19:13:00 GMT -5
Thanks I love your story too....
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Post by jodeefan12 on Dec 21, 2006 17:11:27 GMT -5
I like it, but it kinds of jumps around a little too much for me, maybe just feel in somemore it would really help, other than that i really like it!!!! yeah i agree cause it goes from land to sea to melody to ariel! but its pretty good so far! |
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 21, 2006 19:39:43 GMT -5
Thanks for the comments...
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 29, 2006 22:27:15 GMT -5
BTW.. Moving is tedious work....
Melody crossed her arms at the comment. She knew that she didn't obey her curfew, she just didn't need someone reminding her like Sebastian did.
"So, What about you? I'm sure your dad wouldn't want you out so late." Melody replied trying to put the spot light on him.
"Well, I." Roe began.
"Melody! Is dat you child?!" Sebastian called out.
Melody immediatly pulled Roe behind the rock.
"Don't say a word." She mouthed to Roe. But it was too late, Sebastian had found them.
"Jumping Jellyfish child! Do you know how worried your mother is?!" Sebastian yelled grabbing both Melody and Roe by the hand and leading them back to palace.
When Roe and Melody were dragged into the throne room they found a very stern looking Ariel.
"Melody where have you been!? I was worried sick!!" Ariel's voice rang out through the halls of the the throne room.
Melody looked down at her tail (Funny it would usually be feet), she was sorry for worrying her mom, but her mom brought home killer whales for Trition sake.
"Mom, I just wanted to get some Sanddollars, and I ran into this merboy."
Sorry for such a short chap.. but moving...
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Post by ariel7angel on Dec 30, 2006 10:05:10 GMT -5
NIce little chapter, who does Ariel sound like?  |
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Post by AnastasiaAnya on Dec 30, 2006 11:43:46 GMT -5
Hahaha! King Triton....
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Post by Kimberly on Dec 31, 2006 18:02:22 GMT -5
those are realy good I'm looking fowerd to readding the rest of the story!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Jan 29, 2007 12:22:41 GMT -5
When are you going to write more? |
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Post by Kimberly on Apr 26, 2008 20:44:53 GMT -5
I'm with ariel7angel when are you going to right more. I was just reading the first part of your story and still can't wait to read more.
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