My own version of "part of your world"

[Secret_Grotto_1990]

I wrote this when I was 11, hope you like it!

Look at this stuff
isn't it neat
wouldn't you think my collection's complete
wouldn't you think I'm the girl,
the girl who has everything?

Looking around
at what's for me
all of the pieces belong to the sea
looking around here you think
sure, she's got everything

I've got seashells and blue beads that shimmer
I've got pebbles and dolphins galore
Yes, each weekend I may be a swimmer
but who cares? No big deal
I want more

I wanna be where the mermaids are
I wanna see
wanna see them swimming
flipping around on their (what do you call 'em?)
fins
moving your feet you don't get too far
fins are required for swimming, splashing
floating around somewhere everyone (everyone)
wins

down where they swim
down where they glide
down where they soar and dance and they slide
wanderin' free
wish I could be
part of that world

What would I give
if I could live
out in those waters
what would I pay
to spend a day out of the air
betcha down there
they really care
bet they don't play unfair with daughters
bright young women
born for swimmin'
not born to stand

and ready to know what the mermaids know
ask 'em my questions and get some answers
what's a trident and why does it
-what's the word-
burn

when's it my turn
what would it show
show to explore the world down below
out in the sea
wish I could be
part of that world

[ariel7angel]

WOW what a great song, i love it - you wrote that when you were 11, i couldnt even write something like that now - and im 23, it is just how i feel!!!!

Really good work - love it!!!!

[TreasuresUntold]

I love how you flipped the song around and made it from a humans perspective. great idea!

[Rena Bam Bena x3]

That's really good!

[Prince Florian]

Isn't it neat? Rather, I think.
And here is my version (it's not complete and it's partially in Russian)

Åñëè á ÿ ìîã,
ß áû îòäàë
Âñ¸, ÷òî óãîäíî,
×òîáû õîòü ðàç
 ìèðå ìîðñêîì
Íåäåëþ ïðîæèòü!
ß òàê õî÷ó,
×òîá ïîä âîäîé
Ñìîã áû ÿ ñòàòü íàêîíåö ñâîáîäíûì,
×òîá ñêîðåå
Ñòàòü âçðîñëåå,
Íûðíóòü è ïîïëûòü!

...

Down where they dive!
Down where they swim!
Down where they bathe their tails in a stream!
Under the sea
Wish I could be
Part of THAT world!

[Evy]

Wow that`s cool!
really did you mad that up that`s sssssssssso COOOL!
you`ve got a tallent

[jodeefan12]

thats really good i love it! lol i can relate to your song better