Eric and Ariel A whole new world

[myprincewillbehim]

A Whole New World
(Eric and Ariel)


Eric and Ariel are there Hunny Moon on a boat so while there exploring outside on the deck they sing this song.

Eric- well Ariel what do you want to see first?
I can show you the world
Shining, shimmering, splendid
tell me, princess, now when did
you last let your heart decide?

Ariel –Ohh Eric.

Eric-
I can open your eyes
Take you wonder by wonder
over, sideways and under
on a magic carpet ride (laces his fingers with hers)
A whole new world
A new fantastic point of view
No one to tell us no
or where to go
or say we're only dreaming

Ariel-( turns around to the bow and both Eric and her are looking down) A whole new world
A dazzling place I never knew
But when I'm way up here
It's crystal clear
That now I'm in a whole new world with you
Eric-Now I'm in a whole new world with you

Ariel- Unbelievable sights
Indescribable feeling
Soaring, tumbling, freewheeling
through an endless diamond sky (turns and Eric is behind her)

A whole new world
Eric-Don't you dare close your eyes
Ariel-A hundred thousand things to see
Eric-Hold your breath - it gets better
Ariel- I’m like a shooting star
I've come so far
I can't go back to where I used to be (looks down at the sea).

Eric-A whole new world
Ariel-Every turn a surprise (turns and Eric places his arms around her waist)
Eric-With new horizons to pursue
Ariel-Every moment red-letter
Both-I'll chase them anywhere
There's time to spare
Let me share this whole new world with you (Eric places his head on Ariel’s)

A whole new world
That's where we'll be
ericA thrilling chase
arielA wondrous place
For you and me (once they finish the song they kiss ..For a very long time)

Ariel opens one eye and notices that the crew was watching this whole time. But that does not stop Eric. They all know that he found love and will make sure everything is safe for Ariel, because he loves here with his heart and soul.

The End




please go easy on me i am so new at this

[myprincewillbehim]

ohh heya everyone..just wondering how do u get a avatar on ur user name?

[WickedElphie]

I like the idea of Eric and Ariel on their honeymoon together, but most of the fic is just the song.

The song is kinda jarring because it's very recognizable as Aladdin and Jasmine's love song, and the lyrics referring to flying on a magic carpet are very out of context.

Also using the present tense and script format, makes things a bit off-putting for the reader. Fiction is generally in the past tense.

Don't worry. Everybody starts off a little rough around the edges. You don't even wanna know how bad my earliest stuff was:

Pokemon/Sailor Moon crossovers, Mary Sues, songfics using Britney Spears music...the rest is far too horrifying to even discuss.

Maybe try rewriting the scene with Ariel and Eric talking to each other and see how that goes? I think it has the potential to be a really cute story if you flesh it out a little.

Edit: To use one of the default avatars, click on the "profile" link at the top of the page, then click "Modify profile" and pick one of the options on the drop-down menu next to "avatar".

If you want to use your own first create an account on photobucket.com and upload your image. Follow the first 2 steps of my directions to use a default avatar, only leave the menu alone, and instead copy/paste the url of your photbucket picture where it says "avatar url".

That should work.

[myprincewillbehim]

ty so much for your words i am going to create a whoe new one i just wanted to get that outa my head because whenver i liostin to it i think of that scean that i wrote

[WickedElphie]

You're very welcome. I can't wait to see your next piece.