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Post by lostgurlxx on Sept 20, 2007 4:44:40 GMT -5
sorry about the horrible wait, after my holiday it was straight back to college and ive found it difficult to write more, there will have to be patience but i assure you i am working on it as much as i can
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Post by Prince Mike on Sept 20, 2007 22:46:26 GMT -5
Wow, I cannot wait for more. This is good.
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Post by marina on Sept 21, 2007 10:51:53 GMT -5
wonderfull keep on writhing sweet ,fantastic storis about eric and ariel
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Post by dreamer on Sept 21, 2007 17:00:17 GMT -5
thanks for responding! hope college is going well...don't feel rushed...we CAN and WILL wait....n_n
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Post by twigs232 on Sept 24, 2007 14:54:26 GMT -5
Wow I really enjoyed reading that! LOL
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Post by eltuita on Sept 24, 2007 23:13:01 GMT -5
Dont you worry Honey, take the time you need to write again, but I just want you to know that I really love your Fan Fic and I love to read a bit more about Ariel and Eric, I'm totally in love with your Fan Fic, so please keep it comming
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Post by lostgurlxx on Sept 26, 2007 12:48:53 GMT -5
So here it is, the next bit. Hope you all like it Sebastian and Flounder scoured the sea floor for the little mermaid. They had come so far, looking for her. It was Flounder who had come up with the idea of Ariel visiting Ursula. He of all fish knew just how much Ariel wanted to live on land. Upon the sound of her singing, the two had looked up and swam to the mouth of the cave, peering round and watching as the mermaid was changed into a human girl. As it happened, Flounder had noticed a gap in the ceiling of the cave and, as Ariel’s new legs formed, he flung himself forward, Sebastian close behind and to the girl's surprise, brought himself under her arms, hauling her to the surface. Once she was above sea level, Ariel burst into the human world, gasping for air. Everything was still a blur to her, but one hope rested in her mind, would Eric still love her on legs? As Flounder and Sebastian guided her to the shore, she considered this but shook it off, she was bound to have silly worries like that after doing something so drastic. She finally emerged, at a small cove and slowly got to her new feet. Though she had no idea what time it was she knew there was a long wait ahead before she met Eric. She balanced herself on a jagged rock, which jutted out of the water and stood, breathless, observing her surroundings. Sebastian and Flounder were bobbing on the slowly lapping waves, and Ariel bit her lip, just waiting for Sebastian’s rant. “Just LOOK at her!” He burst, bouncing onto a smaller rock near Ariel’s feet. “On LEGS! On HUMAN LEGS!” The tone of panic could not be deterred from his voice, but Ariel ignored him. At the sound of the word ‘human’ her stomach had flipped. She most certainly was human, and she hoped Eric would still love her for it. Suddenly, over Sebastian’s panicked yells, came Scuttles loud, goofy voice. Everyone looked up to see the seagull flying towards her, grinning as he sang. “Ariel!!” He cried, landing on the rock she was leaning on. “Well, look at what the catfish dragged in! Look at ya! Look at ya! There's something different. Don't tell me - I got it. It's your hairdo, right? You've been using the dinglehopper, right?” Ariel couldn’t wipe the smile from her face and watched as he continued to guess. “No? No huh, well let me see. New . . . seashells?” Ariel shook her head gleefully, every so often looking at her legs to hint to him. “No new seashells. I gotta admit I can't put my foot on it right now, but if I just stand here long enough I know that I'll-” “She’s got LEGS you foolish person! She traded her voice to the sea witch and got legs. Jeez, man . . .” Sebastian's outburst had made Scuttle stop and look embarrassed. “I knew that.” As Ariel tried to balance and walk around properly, Flounder explained to Scuttle that she needed Eric to recognize her and to kiss her as proof. “She’s meeting him later.” Sebastian said finally, holding a claw to his head in exasperation. “Well what’re we standing here for?” Scuttle boomed, jumping up and flying a circuit around Ariel’s head. “You gotta look the part when you meet that boy, now, lemme see..” He began fumbling around with some old sails washed ashore, and soon Ariel was wrapped up comfy and warm in it. She felt beautiful. “Ya look great kid, ya look, sensational!” Scuttle beamed, eyeing the red head as she posed in her new outfit. “Ariel,” Flounder piped up, staring at her from the water. “Maybe you should practice walking?” Ariel nodded happily and followed her friends as they led her away onto a clear section of the beach, free of pointed rocks she could crash into.
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Post by dreamer on Sept 30, 2007 15:32:25 GMT -5
Hey! Great addition! Thanks for writing more! n_n
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Post by lostgurlxx on Sept 30, 2007 18:19:39 GMT -5
its a pleasure, im working on it some more, the next bit will be more exciting, that chapter was just a blueprint for chapters to come
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Post by eltuita on Oct 2, 2007 19:39:10 GMT -5
Ohhh lovely chapter, thank you so much for posting again, I LOVE IT!!! I can't wait for the next bit.
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Post by lostgurlxx on Oct 28, 2007 7:32:05 GMT -5
hey guys, just to tell you, i cant see myself continuing this story for a while. At the moment, with my A levels i just dont have time. Sorry! But hopefully i will get some spare time after exams and be able to finish the adventure
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Post by WickedElphie on Oct 28, 2007 9:51:47 GMT -5
Of course you should concentrate on your exams, right now. If eventually you do decide to finish the story, we'll be here to read it. Good luck on your tests!
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Post by weaselbeast on Nov 1, 2007 21:11:26 GMT -5
A shame that you're taking a break, but well understandable. I had to cut myself off from all my writing a week ago. I look forward to whenever you resume this though; it's easily a step above most TLM fanfiction that I've read.
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Post by jodeefan12 on Nov 2, 2007 9:22:41 GMT -5
this is awesome! i cant wait to read more! i want to know what eric says!
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Post by dreamer on Jan 4, 2009 4:04:07 GMT -5
If you have the time please continue this. It's too wonderful a story to not have an ending.
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Post by ariel101 on Jan 4, 2009 15:33:37 GMT -5
Wow this is sooooo good. I LOVE it. Please write more its soo good. Great job!!!
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Post by fathomsbelow on Jan 4, 2009 17:53:40 GMT -5
This is a really good story. Well done, and good luck on your exams!
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Post by fridamoonbeam on Jan 6, 2009 0:29:10 GMT -5
Oh, I really love this. If you can please continue. You write the characters so well. I can always tell who really knows them and who doesn't.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jan 6, 2009 0:46:29 GMT -5
Not to rain on the parade guys but lostgirl hasn't logged in since last March. It's somewhat unlikely that the story will be updated-which is a real shame. :(
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Post by fridamoonbeam on Jan 6, 2009 0:50:22 GMT -5
Bummer :(
But RL comes first, and sometimes it's hard to keep hold of your muse.
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