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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 22, 2006 23:05:50 GMT -5
Ooh Drama! I'm hooked! I like the conflicts you've set up here, and I can't wait to see how things will turn out!
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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 17, 2006 0:51:24 GMT -5
A very nice start. I liked that you took the time to set up Ariel & Eric being comfortable and playful with one another. If you write angst/mystery as well as fluff/romance, you'll be in good shape.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jul 16, 2006 14:20:55 GMT -5
On ff.net I found a very cute parody of The Little Mermaid featuring a hitchhiking ghost from the Hunted Mnsion and a Disney cast member. It's pretty dang funny and features parodies of the songs from the movie. www.fanfiction.net/s/2961102/1/
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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 28, 2006 21:06:36 GMT -5
Awww! I'm really enjoying this fic! The only thing is, at the end, maybe Eric should say "honeymoon" instead of bridal week?
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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 25, 2006 18:43:05 GMT -5
Only one word can describe this chapter: AWWW! So sweet!
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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 24, 2006 16:52:55 GMT -5
So far I like it a lot. Props on starting on the day of the marriage, I have yet to see a TLM fic do that. My one complaint is that because of this line: Never did she imagine that one-day, she would have a collection worth singing about. I now have the song "Something to Sing About" from the Buffy musical episode stuck in my head. "Life's a show and we all play a paaart..." *Cough* Nice job.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jun 28, 2006 23:28:51 GMT -5
It's an interesting alternate scenario and it's written very nicely.
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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 29, 2006 20:40:24 GMT -5
I *heart* Eric's friends and this tsory but I'm actually fine with you leaving it there-so you can get started on the sequel where Tony, Ethan, Charlotte, and James find out about Ariel's secret. Kidding! You don't have to start it RIGHT away.
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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 28, 2006 20:05:27 GMT -5
Ethan's such a sweetie. I love his interactions with everyone. Don't feel any pressure. Real Life responsibilities have to come first.
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Post by WickedElphie on Sept 17, 2006 0:48:44 GMT -5
Awww! And Because it cannot be said enough: Awww! I loved it and can't wait to see how everything ends.
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Post by WickedElphie on Aug 14, 2006 19:30:11 GMT -5
Wonderful! Finally got a chance to play catch-up, and I'm glad I did. Tony is awesome and I love her dearly, and the sleepover was The cuteness. I love Eric's attempt to get his history notes.
The latter bits are more serious but just as well written, and i can't wait to see how you wrap this up.
Also Aquisha, even though you haven't even finished yet, I am now dying for a sequel in which Tony, Ethan, James, and Charlotte discover Ariel's secret (assuming that doesn't happen at the end of this story.)
I specifically want James to have his initial reaction in King Triton's presence, which is such that the others are left trying to simultaniously shut him up and smooth things over.
That would be very amusing.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jul 21, 2006 11:16:11 GMT -5
Don't worry about it, Dreamer. It was an honest mistake. *Searches for something on-topic* I love Eric in this story. He's having trouble stating his feelings, but he's not acting like a moron about it.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jul 16, 2006 13:42:27 GMT -5
I'm glad you've gotten over your writer's block. Such a cute chapter! Best . Line. Ever!
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Post by WickedElphie on Jul 15, 2006 14:15:55 GMT -5
Thanks Dreamer, though I am in fact a 'she'. No harm done, just thought I'd clarify. For a middle event, perhaps some sort of a game? Charades or something similarly fun-yet-embarrassing. Or more making fun or Eric as the gang relates some amusingly inappropriate outings while they were in school? Maybe involving foolish pranks or inebriated singing...er...attempts at singing? Eric: "You swore you'd never mention that incident again!" James: "I'm not mentioning it. I'm describing it in excruciatingly painful detail." Ethan (trying not to laugh): I think it's only fair that Ariel knows what she's getting into. One of the girls: Oh, if she hasn't run away screaming yet, she can handle anything. Eric (defeated): I hate you all. (to Ariel) Not you! Just my so-called friends. Another girl: Oh, we love you too. Now accept defeat like a man and let James finish! Just a couple ideas. Hope they help.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jul 14, 2006 23:39:07 GMT -5
Heh. I like Ethan and James. James is so the confidant (former) playboy, while Ethan is the understanding best friend with the good advice. They make a great tag-team. Poor Eric though.
I'd like to see a talk with just the girls. It'd be interesting and add a sort of a 'Summer Nights' in Grease thing, which would be very cute. "Tell me more, tell me more..."
Props on the characterization of ALL your OCs. Not a Mary Sue or Gary Stu in sight.
*Two thumbs WAY up!*
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Post by WickedElphie on Jun 29, 2006 16:09:05 GMT -5
Fluffy yet satisfying! Nice job. One thing, I noticed one or two omitted words, though I can't exactly remember where. A good way to avoid that is to make sure you read over your chapter as you're writing it, once after it's finished, and once after it's posted. You'd be surprised what you catch on the final read-through. That's what I do. You might still have mistakes, but there'll be less.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jun 25, 2006 22:24:07 GMT -5
Cute. Heh-I love the driftwood of DOOM! That's like something that would happen to me.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jun 12, 2006 16:39:10 GMT -5
Nice continuation. Can't wait to see what's next.
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Post by WickedElphie on Jun 6, 2006 19:21:33 GMT -5
Absolutly adorable! Props on your characterization, and the overall quality. I can't wait to see where this story goes!
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Post by WickedElphie on Apr 6, 2008 15:49:59 GMT -5
Well, as soon as Triton finds out that Eric can play the sea calliope, he's totally gonna be the favorite potential son-in-law. Still loving the interactions between the two of them, especially since there is so little of it (i.e. none) in the movies. The musical gives a little bit more, but still not much.
I can't wait to see where Ariel takes Eric, and I have a feeling I'm going to love it. Preemptive Squee!
Can't wait!
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