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Post by Ariel on May 3, 2011 12:44:15 GMT -5
I love this chapter! Thank you for taking your time to write it for us
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Post by Kimberly on May 13, 2011 22:43:49 GMT -5
love the chapter please write more soon.
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Post by daytripper on May 14, 2011 14:57:46 GMT -5
ill write the dew chapters that i have left tommorow, last weekend i had this event on saturday and was busy doing work on sunday and tonight i have prom. ; )
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Post by daytripper on Jun 25, 2011 0:00:21 GMT -5
SOOOOO i finally started writing again now that school is over (Woo hoo bye junior year 2011) anyways im starting the last chapter now and i PROMISE that it will be out sooner than this one was, im sorry for the wait. anyways PLEASE COMMENT AND REVIEW!!!!!
Chapter 16
The Day of Days
Marty was upset that tomorrow would be his last day, he had been having so much fun in Ariel's world he wanted desperately to live there.
He went up to the surface and got out his cell phone tucked neatly inside his suit. He called for his friend to bring him his guitar and Ipod.
“Why the he** do you want your guitar and Ipod?” Ray asked totally confused as to why his best friend would ask him that.
“I just want to do a few experiments” Marty said watching the signal strength fluctuate.
“Experiments?” Ray asked wondering why he would want to ruin a guitar and Ipod.
“Just get it for me” Marty said annoyed by his friends interrogation. Marty didn't blame him though, if he was in Ray's position he would be asking the exact same thing.
“Whatever you say bro” Ray said hanging up.
Marty hung up the phone and waited. He liked thinking to himself about life, friends, work, history, whatever was on his mind. But this time only one thing kept popping into his head, Ariel. Marty liked her that much was clear, but did he love her? The entire time he was with her he had more fun than he had in his 28 years of life. 'I'm lucky' Marty thought to himself, '28 and I still have hair, a great body, and good health'.
Marty floated there alone with his thoughts for about an hour before he spotted his friend. Ray was speeding towards him. Ray was wearing a white T-shirt and jeans and looked like he just rolled out of bed.
“Ray, what happened you look like you just threw some clothes on and got in the boat” Marty said climbing up the side of the boat. He hadn't been out of the water for more than two days.
“That's because I did” Ray responded with a grunt. He had an unlit cigarette in his mouth and every time he talked or moved his mouth the cigarette would jerk up and down.
“You got my stuff?” Marty asked in an upbeat tone. Ray pointed to a heap of junk at the side of the boat. Marty walked over and picked up his guitar and Ipod, He then preceded to jump in the water and swim off.
“WHAT THE he**? NOT EVEN A GOODBYE?” Ray said to himself as he started the boat.
Marty speed down to the bottom of the sea with all his stuff hoping that they would still work. He wanted Ariel to get a taste of the human world before he left.
He got to the seafloor and scanned the area. No one. 'Perfect' Marty thought to himself setting the things down and turning on his Ipod. It worked.
'I wonder whats happening in the world' Marty thought as he fiddled with his Ipod. He decided to check by turning on his radio that was built into the Ipod. Even out in the middle of the sea he got reception.
He fiddled with the stations trying to find something interesting.
<...AND IN OTHER NEWS THE BAND GREEN DAY WILL BE PREFORMING LIVE TONIGHT AT THE SONO BEACH HOUSE...... 8:30 TONIGHT.....TICKETS ARE STILL ON SALE AT.......>
Marty turned off the radio, he had heard enough. This was going to be the best night ever, Ariel will have a blast, Marty wouldn't even need to sing, but he decided that Ariel would prefer it if he sang.
6:30 and Marty was all set and ready to go. He waited for Ariel to come into the Grotto, which he had decorated with certain human things Ariel had collected to make it more magical. He collected multicolored lights and put them up around the opening at the top of the Grotto, when he turned them on, they are connected to a motor which will make them move around causing a disco effect. He found some amplifiers and connected them together to provide maximum sound quality.
Ariel swam in just as Marty was finished. Much to his delight Ariel had decided to have fun and dress up as if she was going to a real concert. She had a pear necklace, her hair was combed perfectly, and she had gold colored coral earrings.
“Hello Marty” Ariel said swimming into the Grotto, her green tail sparkling under the moonlight that managed to get into the cave. “Wow this is cool” Ariel said surveying his handiwork.
“Well I'm no professional but I think I did a good job decorating” Marty said swimming over to Ariel's side to survey his own work.
“I think its wonderful” Ariel said hugging Marty. Somehow Ariel managed to have perfume on underwater which didn't displease Marty, but it did make him question what humans know about the ocean.
“Soooo, shall we begin?” Marty asked taking Ariel's hand and leading her to a rock at the edge of the cavern.
“Sure” Ariel said giggling. It was music to Marty's ears.
“Then let us begin” Marty said picking up his guitar and plugging it into the amplifier, Ariel sat quietly and patiently with her hands on her lap.
Marty practiced a few strums and tuned the guitar. He cleared his throat and looked out at Ariel.
“This is a personal favorite of mine, its a song by my favorite band, Green Day” Marty said speaking into a microphone he found.
“Hey Gloria? Are you standing close to the edge? Lookout to the setting sun The brink of your vision Eternal youth is a landscape of the lie”
Ariel listened to the song intently thinking about each word and its meaning. She would sing to tell stories or he wants and needs, how she felt, but this, this was something else.
“The cracks of my skin can prove As the years will testify Say your prayers and light a fire we're going to start a war Your slogan's a gun for hire It's what we waited for”
Ariel loved Marty's voice, it was deep, smooth, calming, and peaceful.
Hey Gloria
This is why we were on the edge The fight of our lives been drawn to this undying love
Marty was finding it rather difficult to play this song on the guitar since it is played on the piano in the first part. Ariel was enjoying it though.
“Gloria!Viva La Gloria! You blast your name in graffiti on the walls (oh) Falling through broken glass that's slashing through your spirit I can hear it like a jilted crowd”
This part startled Ariel, she had never heard such.... hard music. She didn't know what to think of it at first but decided that it was nice, she had wanted to sing fiercely sometimes, to let her emotions pour out into the water.
“Gloria!Where are you Gloria? You found a home in all your scars and ammunition You made your bed in salad days amongst the ruins Ashes to ashes of our youth
She smashed her knuckles into winter (Gloria) As autumns wind fades into black She is the saint of all the sinners (Gloria) The one that's fallen through the cracks So don't put away your burning light
Gloria!Where are you Gloria? Don't lose you faith to your lost naivete Weather the storm and don't look back on last November When your banners were burning down
Gloria!Viva La Gloria! Send me your amnesty down to the broken hearted Bring us the season that we always will remember Don't let the bonfires go out
So Gloria
Send out your message of the light that shadows in the night Gloria where's your undying love? Tell me the story of your life ... (Your life!) “
If Marty wasn't underwater he would be sweating buckets right now. He had never poured such emotion and love into anything before.
“Marty, that was... Amazing!” Ariel said swimming up to Marty and giving him a hug. She released her embrace but kept her hands on his shoulders.
“You liked it?” Marty asked with a chuckle.
“Liked it? I LOVED it! I never heard such.... enthralling music, it seemed to give you a sense of...Ugh I can't explain it!!!” Ariel said, upset that she couldn't let Marty in on her experience.
“I know what you mean” Marty said. “That's how I felt when I first heard it” Marty said checking his watch. It was 8:04 They needed to start swimming if they were going to make it. The Sono beach house was a fairly good distance away.
“Ariel, I have another surprise for you, but you have to go to the surface, and it involves getting fairly close to humans.... lots and lots of humans” Marty said looking deep into Ariel's eyes
Ariel smiled and got close to Marty's face.
“Whats the surprise?”
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Post by Ariel on Jun 25, 2011 20:34:44 GMT -5
Wonderful chapter!! I love it
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Post by josh89 on Jun 26, 2011 1:30:23 GMT -5
great chapter and welcome back !
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arielrebel
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Post by arielrebel on Jun 26, 2011 16:57:10 GMT -5
Very nice! I appreciate the use of Green Day!
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Post by daytripper on Jun 27, 2011 4:29:05 GMT -5
Very nice! I appreciate the use of Green Day! Green Day got me through Junior year, couldn't have gotten through those math and english classes without them. : D
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Post by Kimberly on Jul 3, 2011 15:23:57 GMT -5
good chapter I'm looking foreword to seeing how your story ends.
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Post by daytripper on Jul 18, 2011 23:41:34 GMT -5
Chapter 17
Marty floated with Ariel on the surface watching the beach from a distance. The people on the beach looked like ants but Marty was still close enough to make out peoples details. They were floating just inside the boat markers which boats are not supposed to go past and swimmers are also not supposed to cross.
“Look at all those humans” Ariel said admiring the people on the beach. Ariel always thought that humans were better species than Merfolk. For one thing humans can live on land and under the sea, and they have an amazing ability to understand the universe and how things work.
“Yeah the concert should be starting soon all the people are getting ready, a lot of them have glow sticks” Marty said looking at all the people. Behind them boats were bobbing up and down with the waves. Some of the boats were big yachts but most were small to medium size.
The sun had set but the large floodlights set up on the beach allowed them to see everything clearly. Suddenly a loud strum of a electric guitar amplified by huge speakers pierced the ocean calm.
Smoke started to pour off the stage and Marty and Ariel could barely make out figures on the stage. Marty could hear them playing American Idiot but from their distance it was muffled somewhat. Marty immediately had an idea but dismissed it, at that moment he knew Ariel would have the same idea.
“I'm going to get a closer look” Ariel said diving into the ocean.
“No wait ARIEL” Marty cried swimming after her. If anyone saw her it would immediately arouse suspicion, no one is allowed in the water since its dark and there are no life guards on duty.
“Ariel Stop!” Marty yelled chasing after her. In just three days Marty had begun to swim faster than before and was now able to compete with Ariel's speed.
“ARIEL!!!” Marty called through the water. Marty had never seen Ariel so excited before, it was strange to Marty to see her swim as fast as she could towards her goal.
At last she came to a stop in the shallow water, just below the surface. They were probably 12 feet from the shore, if it were low tide they would be on land.
“Ariel, don't go to the surface” Marty said cautiously not knowing what to do.
Ariel was laying on the sand and slowly raising her head up towards the surface. They were so close Marty could make out blurry figures of people on the beach.
“Ariel listen to me do not stick your head above the water” Marty said getting frantic.
Ariel stuck her head above the waves. On the beach Ariel could see humans some on blankets, most standing up all of them were watching, and hearing, and talking about the same thing, that band on the stage.
“Why don't you listen to me? Do I just have a face that no one listens to?” Marty said getting upset. “That's it!” Marty said grabbing Ariel's tail and pulling her out into deeper water.
“HEY! What's your deal!!!” Ariel said crossing her arms and staring angrily at Marty. Unfortunately for her, Marty thought that she looked cute when she was mad, which caused him to chuckle.
“WHAT ARE YOU LAUGHING AT?” Ariel replied angrily.
“Your so cute when your angry” Marty said.
“CUTE?” Ariel yelled. “That's it I am done her tonight!” Ariel said storming off into the ocean.
“Ariel wait!” Marty said chasing after her.
“HELP, MARTY!!!!” Ariel called from off in the distance. Marty raced over to where he heard her scream hoping she was okay. As he approached Marty could make out Ariel trapped in a net being towed by a large fishing boat.
“d*****” Marty whispered to himself swimming after the boat.
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Post by Ariel on Jul 19, 2011 13:44:54 GMT -5
Great chapter! i wonder what happens next
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Post by daytripper on Aug 12, 2011 21:16:25 GMT -5
Here it is, the second to last chapter
Chapter 18
Marty chased after the large fishing boat trying desperately to close the distance between them. After about thirty minutes of swimming Marty finally caught up with the boat. It was a fairly large fishing ship, about 50 yards long.
Marty climbed up the side of the ship and looked on the deck. There was no one. The rich blackness of the night was pierced by the lights on the ship. Marty climbed on board the ship not knowing what to expect, he was an intruder, an invader, and unwelcome guest. But he didn't care, he wanted to find Ariel and go back to his home where he belonged.
Marty carefully searched the top of the ship looking in barrels, nets, and even boxes. He finally finished searching and knew what he had to do next. He had to go below the deck and search the inside of the ship without getting caught. Which is much easier said than done.
Marty striped himself of his big bulky fins, and his face mask. He was going to have to be sneaky and fast. He quickly hid his things behind a barrel close to the edge of the boat in case he would have to make a quick getaway.
Marty took a deep breath and quickly descended into the ship. Marty searched the entire second floor without seeing Ariel or the crew.
It was on the third deck that he saw Ariel, in a large fish tank protected by a soundly sleeping guard.
“MARTY!” Ariel exclaimed when she saw him.
“SHH-SHUT THE-SHHH” Marty said flailing his arms around trying to get he to be quiet.
'sorry' Ariel mouthed.
'How do I get you out?' Marty half whispered, half mouthed.
Ariel pointed to a latch at the top of the tank, there was a small opening and a fold down ladder for easy access to the tank when its not in use. The entire tank was made out of a clear thick plastic, it reminded Marty of the plastic glass at ice hockey rinks, only much clearer.
Marty climbed on top of the tank and quietly unlatched the small door. He pulled down the ladder to make it easier for Ariel to get up. Quickly and quietly Ariel climbed up the ladder and got pulled out of the tank by Marty. Marty carefully picked her up and slowly started to make his way off the tank.
Marty quickly made his way topside where he threw Ariel overboard before going back to grab his gear. As soon as he was ready he heard alarms start to ring and men start yelling.
“Time to go” Marty said to himself before jumping overboard into the sea which he has grown to love.
“Thank you for saving me” Ariel said gratefully. She would never have gotten out of that situation by herself. While she was captured there was one moment where she thought Marty was not going to rescue her, after all she had been a jerk to him. After running off she was not sure if Marty had followed her or not.
“It was nothing” Marty said shrugging it off. In reality though it was something. Marty risked getting caught and most likely arrested at the least. “You would have done the same for me” Marty added letting her know he trusted her.
“I couldn't even if I tried” Ariel said laughing. “I have fins, not feet” she said pointing to her bright green fins. Ariel would have tried though, she would have found some way to get Marty back. Nevertheless she was grateful for him saving her.
“Come on, we should get back home” Marty said. He realized that he just called Atlantica home, which came as a shock to him. He had never felt at home before in his life. But for the first time he felt as if he actually belonged here, and he wanted to stay.
“Marty? Are you okay?” Ariel asked breaking Marty away from his thoughts. He didn't realize that he had drifted off in thought.
“Fine why?” he asked trying to make it seem like nothing happened.
“Your crying” she said looking at him with a worried expression. Marty brought his hand up to his face and felt the salty tears that failed to blend in with the seawater.
“So I am” he said wiping the tears from his face. 'That was odd' Marty thought to himself. Why was he crying? Was it because he loved being under the sea and didn't want to leave? He didn't know, but one thing was certain, he couldn't go back to Atlantica, it would make leaving more painful.
“Ariel, I have to go” Marty said sadly. He didn't want to leave yet, but he knew he must. But mostly he didn't want to see Ariel hurt.
“What? You mean home?” Ariel asked not wanting to believe what she was hearing.
“Yes, but, to my home, above the sea” He said pointing towards the surface. Marty watched as all the happiness and optimism washed away from her face.
“Oh, o-okay” Ariel said, not believing that the time had finally come. Ariel had grown to love having Marty around, without him, she felt lonely and empty inside.
“Its time I moved on, make things the way they were” Marty said trying to justify him running away. There was no justifying it, he was running away not because he had to, but because he chose to. He was scared of what the crab said.
“Look I don't want to make this any harder than it has to be” Marty said.
“I know, just...go” Ariel said, sad that she was losing her fiend.
Marty shrugged and looked at Ariel one last time, admiring all that he had gone through with her. She had her arms crossed and was looking down, avoiding eye contact with him. Her green tail swished through the water with grace, helping to keep her in the same spot.
“Ariel, I'm sorry but, I have family and friends to go to, people who care deeply about me” He said in sorrowful tone.
“I know” She said.
Marty sighed and put his hand on her shoulder. Her soft ghostly white skin felt cool to his touch, yet warm at the same time.
“You, will always be, my friend” Marty said.
With that Marty turned around and headed towards the spot where he and Ray chose to meet once the three days were done.
please comment and review, it means alot to me!!
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Post by Ariel on Aug 14, 2011 18:21:40 GMT -5
I love it!Great job
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Post by daytripper on Aug 15, 2011 18:40:01 GMT -5
Thanks for the comment!!!!
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Post by Eric on Aug 16, 2011 21:38:20 GMT -5
LOVE It. You really captured Ariel's personality in this fanfic Can't Wait to read more
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Post by daytripper on Aug 18, 2011 0:14:49 GMT -5
Here it is, the moment you have all been waiting for, The final chapter, My first completed story.
Chapter 19
Marty was picked up by Ray after three hours of waiting. The water was feeling cold after staying stationary for so long. Marty was a little ticked off that it took Ray s long to get him, normally he would have been there in a few minutes.
“What the heck?” Marty said as Ray pulled him on board “Three hours I've been waiting”
“Sorry bro I was asleep, and didn't get your text until a few minutes ago” Ray said helping Marty out of the scuba gear. “So...?” Ray asked.
“So what?” Marty replied still very upset about the whole waiting thing.
“What was it like living under the sea?” Ray asked looking at him with great interest as if he was about to tell a story.
Marty knew that he had to protect Ariel and the Merpeople, as much as he didn't want to he decided to like to his best friend. It was for the good of the world, Marty thought to himself.
“It sucked, there is absolutely nothing down there, also this mask has a lot of flaws” Marty said, much to Ray's disappointment.
Unknown to Marty and Ray, there was another set of eyes watching and listening to the conversation. She knew that Marty had just lied, and she was happy that he did. Ariel was hanging on at the front of the boat. She had followed Marty and waited behind the same coral reef he slammed into when he first met her. She waited until Marty was on the boat before coming closer.
Ariel grabbed onto the anchor and hung onto it as she listened to their conversation.
“You mean to tell me you never saw one freaking fish in the three days you were down there?” Ray asked getting annoyed at how Marty was avoiding the questions. He had never seen his friend act like this before and it was starting to worry him.
“I saw a bunch of fish, okay? Bass, flounder, crabs, what more do you want?” Marty said getting angry that his friend wouldn't leave him alone.
“Sorry man, I just thought it would be cool to live under the sea for three days” Ray said sadly, upset that his best friend was also upset.
“It's okay bro, I just had a long three days, I need to sleep” Marty said, he didn't mean to get upset with Ray, he was just sad that he could never see Ariel, or Atlantica, or Flounder ever again.
Ariel watch as Marty thought to himself for a while, he didn't look very happy to Ariel. He sighed and looked up at Ray.
“Ready to go home?” Ray asked him.
“Yeah” Marty said rubbing his face.
He had a long three days, and he really didn't want to go home, but he knew he needed rest and time to think about what happened.
“Lets go” Marty said getting up and turning on the boat.
Marty travel for thirty minutes before he finally reached the harbor. Ariel had to let go of the anchor and follow his boat underwater while in the harbor so no one would see her. As they entered the harbor Ariel was amazed at how many boats there were, she hadn't been in a harbor since she was a human many years ago.
Ariel was able to get a better look at Marty without all that scuba gear on. Marty looked to be in his late teens early twenties, he was wearing a button down Hawaiian pattern shirt which was unbuttoned allowing Ariel to see his muscular chest. He also had on some khaki shorts and blue docksiders. He looked magnificently handsome to Ariel. He had acquired at little stubble after being underwater for three days.
Marty sailed the boat up to one of the docks in the harbor but didn't stop the engines or get off. Instead he dropped off Ray.
Marty noticed movement in the water and swore he saw a streak of red hair. Marty hoped that she was actually there but he new his chances were slim, not even a dumb Mermaid would follow him into a human harbor.
Marty bade farewell to Ray and set off to his own private dock next to his house. Unknown to him he was still being followed by Ariel.
Twenty minutes later Marty arrived at his dock. As he Tied up his boat and started to unpack his things he heard a splash at the front of the boat. Curious Marty walked over to check it out.
Ariel waited for a few minutes hanging on to the anchor at the front of the boat waiting for Marty to get settled before releasing her grip and dropping into the shallow water. Unfortunately she made a little audible splash as she landed. Quickly she swam under the boat to avoid getting caught.
Marty looked over the side of the boat searching for the source of the splash before finally giving up.
After Marty was finished getting his things put away he tied a line to his inflatable tube and decide to relax for a few hours. And so for about thirty minutes Marty lay there relaxing and thinking about all the fun he had in Atlantica, Fun, that's something Marty hadn't had in a long time.
'What's he doing?' Ariel thought to herself.
Ariel decide to be brave an have some fun. Using one of her fins she mimicked a shark circling Marty.
Marty, who heard the sound of water being disturbed, did not notice that the fin was greenish instead of gray.
“WHAT THE he**!” Marty said scrambling to get all of his limbs into the tiny tube. Freaking out Marty jumped into the water and swam as fast as he could towards the boat. When he finally reached it he climbed on board as fast as he could. Once he was safe he watched as the green fin submerged. A few seconds later he watched as his tube was pulled under the water.
“This, is very, very weird” Marty said to himself.
He watched as the tube came flying out of the water a few seconds later.
Marty scanned the water for any signs of the shark. He failed to notice a human figure lurking just below the surface in front of him.
“HI” Ariel said jumping out of the water.
“AHHHHHHH!” Marty screamed like a little girl, “Don't do that Ariel” Marty yelled. Marty took a while to calm himself before doing a double take.
“ARIEL WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE?” Marty said nearly pulling his hair out.
“Marty, first off I want to know two thing,” Ariel said holing up two fingers “One, Why you REALLY don't want to see me, and two, why you scream like a girl” She said smiling at the last part.
“Oh I see, make jokes about me, okay” Marty said smiling. “Fine, I'll tell you the real reason” Marty said.
And so Marty told Ariel everything Sebastian said to him, about the threat to tell her father, and how he didn't want to see Ariel get hurt again, By the time he was done they were both sitting on the side of the boat.
“Marty, you never had to leave, first off Sebastian was lying he is too scared of Daddy to do anything. And He doesn't have to worry, I like you as a friend nothing more” Ariel said smiling.
“Gee thanks, it nice to know I never even had a chance with you” Marty said with a smirk.
“Ouch” Marty said as Ariel punched him in the arm.
“Well its nice to know we can still be friends” Marty said.
He sat there for a few hours watching the sun set with Ariel.
The End
Please comment and tell me what you thought of the story. Thank you all for reading and commenting it has meant alot to me and helped me finish this story.
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Post by arielrebel on Aug 21, 2011 12:40:55 GMT -5
Awesome story keep up the good work!
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Post by Eric on Aug 21, 2011 16:13:12 GMT -5
keep up the good work! i love it
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