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Post by daytripper on Feb 9, 2011 20:29:51 GMT -5
you will love this fanfic it will be better than all my others and WILL get finished bcause i already know the ending the plot and everything else. its a fun little story and i hope you enjoy and dont forget to comment and [shadow=red,left,300]Review[/shadow]
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Post by daytripper on Feb 9, 2011 20:30:52 GMT -5
Chapter 1 A Nice Day
It was a beautiful day both above and below the sea. The water was clear and there wasn't a cloud in sight. Ariel was taking a morning swim through the coral reef. She was accompanied by her best friend Flounder.
“Such a beautiful peaceful day wouldn't you agree flounder?” Ariel sighed. She had since forgotten about Eric. It had been so long since she was human it was more like a distant memory. She was able to readjust and move on with her life.
“Yeah its so quiet... no scary things... only silence” He said floating on his back in a relaxed position. He loved going out with Ariel for swims like this it reminded him of the old days. Because Ariel was human though she knew everything that fell into the sea and stopped going on “adventures” a long time ago.
Ariel relaxed and gently floated down on top of the reef and closed her eyes.
Meanwhile up on the surface...
A young man is about to go scuba diving to test his new invention... the re breather. What it does is it takes oxygen from the surrounding water and allows the wearer to breathe forever underwater. No air tanks!
“You set?” Ray asked Marty. Ray was Marty's best friend and scuba buddy for Five years now. But today he would be diving alone. To make sure the thing works he will have to stay under for two days. During which time Ray will go back to the harbor and wait until his friend calls for him on the radio.
“Almost” Marty said as he turned around and grabbed the radio. He slipped it into one of the back pockets on his belt. “One last thing” Marty said picking up the re breather. The device was actually very small so it wasn't uncomfortable to use for hours on end. After all what good is something if its too much of a hassle to use? It was essentially a mask that sealed around the face so the user could see, breathe, and talk to other scuba divers. The actual breathing apparatus was mounted on the side of the mask and resembled a snorkel. Marty finished putting on his flippers and dry suit.
“Alright now remember if anything happens just radio for me and ill be here in like 20 minutes” Ray said to his friend as he walked over to the side of the boat. Marty sat down on the edge of the boat and looked up at his friend.
“Dude ill be fine... what you don't have any faith in my invention?” Marty asked.
“None whatsoever” Ray replied with a grin.
“Well here I go” Marty said sticking the device in his mouth and jumping into the water. He popped up a short time later and gave him a thumbs up before diving beneath the waves.
Ariel Woke up on the reef and realized hat she had fallen asleep. She looked round to see flounder asleep next to her. He was curled up in a ball and looked so cute and peaceful. Ariel stroked his blue back fin. Suddenly Ariel hear something strange in the distance. At first it sounded like a humming, but as it got closer Ariel could tell it was loud and moving fast. Ariel kept spinning around trying to find the source of the noise. It was now a roaring sound and sounded like... it was right above her! Ariel glanced up to see something moving fast on the surface. Ariel marveled at the sight as it sped away. She wondered if it was human, she hadn't seen a human since she became a mermaid again and wondered for the first time since she left what the human world was like.
Flounder was woken up by the sound of the motor boat overhead and got scared. He immediately got up and swam over to Ariel and hide in her think red hair.
“What was that?” Flounder asked.
“I don't know” Ariel said looking up at the surface hoping the thing would return. They looked for a few minutes before realizing that the thing wasn't coming back and sunk to the sea floor. Ariel was curious as to what was making that loud noise and what made the thing move so fast?
Marty was amazed at the variety of fish he was seeing. Some of them weren't even supposed to be in this part of the sea! There were tropical fish... out here... in the ocean! Why were all these fish here? Marty wondered to himself. As he studied the fish more carefully he could tell that they were... watching him? Yes they did appear to be studying him and his every move. Feeling little scared he spotted a old shipwreck and swam towards it curious as to what was inside.
Ariel started to swim back towards Atlantica when she spotted something swimming towards an old shipwreck.
“Whats that?” Ariel asked flounder.
“Whats what?” Flounder replied looking in the direction Ariel was looking. They saw something black swim into the boat through one of the portholes.
“Come on flounder!” Ariel said grabbing Flounders fin and swimming towards the boat.
“AAARRRIIIIEEELLLLL!!!!” Flounder cried as Ariel pulled him along.
Ariel let go of flounder and motioned for him to be quiet and swam up alongside the ship. Slowly and carefully Ariel peered into the ship through a porthole. At first she didn't see anything but then suddenly she saw something swimming through the ship. It looked like a merman but with a split tail or two tails. Their was something on his face that had bubbles coming from it.
Ariel suddenly started to swim into the ship which made flounder flip out.
“Ariel What Are You Doing?” Flounder whispered
Ariel ignored him and continued to swim towards the mysterious... what ever it was.
She swam up behind the creature and hesitated for a second then composed herself.
“Um Excuse me?” Ariel said timidly.
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Post by Ariel on Feb 9, 2011 21:02:25 GMT -5
Wonderful Chapter! I Can't wait to read more
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Post by ღAmiღ on Feb 10, 2011 6:40:33 GMT -5
oohh! I can't wait to know what happens next!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 10, 2011 15:04:27 GMT -5
I relay like your story so far. I'm a diver myself and I have often wondered what it mite be like to come face to face with a mermaid. 73% of our planet is covered with water, of that we've seen maybe 10-20% of it who knows what the other 50% holds. So I try to keep an open mind as to what mite be out there waiting to be found. I can't wait to read more.
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Post by daytripper on Feb 10, 2011 16:25:37 GMT -5
Chapter 2 Surprise Surprise “Excuse me?” Came a voice from behind Marty who became immediately confused. Wasn't he underwater? He spun around (as fast as you could possibly spin underwater) startling both the girl and himself. “HOLY SH-... SH- OH My GOD!” Marty said moving away from the mermaid that was in front of him. A REAL FREAKING MERMAID!!!!!!!!!!!! Marty's brain screamed. He soon found it difficult to breathe and realized he was breathing too hard. Getting his breathing and heart rate under control was no easy task but he still managed to do it and quickly too. He looked at the mermaid and marveled at how beautiful she was. Bright red hair the was floating all over as if it had a mind of its own, flawless pale skin, bright green tail, purple seashell bra, she was stunning and looked so weird floating there so comfortable and content. She looked like he was in space, floating perfectly still and when she moved she glided through the water so gracefully. “I didn't mean to scare you” Ariel said putting on her comfort face. She could tell there was something... unfishy about this creature that had two fins and a black body like a whale. However Ariel never let a good adventure pass by so she continued to talk. “What are you?” Ariel asked swimming over to him and circling him like a shark. “What do you mean?” Marty responded nervously. His voice was shaky and he couldn't believe what was happening. “I've never see a creature like you before, your half human half merfolk” Ariel said still circling him. She finally stopped swimming and looked him in the face. Now Marty was freaking out. It took him all his strength to not run away or pass out or yell at the top of his lungs. Ariel smiled and reached out to touch him. She hesitated for a second then slowly reached out to feel his weird lack skin. What kind of creature is he? Ariel thought to herself letting her curiosity get the better of her. Oh no she going to touch me! Marty thought panicking. He instinctively moved back which made Ariel move closer. “Whats wrong?” She said in her sweet caring voice. Her soothing voice did very little to calm down Marty who had had enough. He had herd the tales of mermaids drowning sailors, cruel, evil, they seem sweet but will lead you to your death. Marty spun around and began swimming away as fast and furiously as he could. Leaving a trail of bubbles in his wake. Ariel floated motionless pondering what to do before snapping back into reality. “Wait!” Ariel yelled swimming after him. “Wait!” She yelled again. Marty looked back to see her swimming after him... and fast. There was no way he would be able to out swim her! He turned his attention away from the mermaid and looked to see where he was going... before smashing into a reef. Ariel watched in horror as the scared fish slammed into a coral reef. It floated there for a moment before floating down to the ocean floor landing in a cloud of dust. “Poor thing” Ariel said to herself as flounder swam up to her. “Why was it scared of you?” Flounder asked. “Maybe its never seen a mermaid before... just like when we first met. You were so scared and cute” Ariel said smiling at the memory. She swam over to the creature and looked at it more closely. “Its hideous” Flounder said. He examined the “fins” of the creature and looked at the face mask. “FLOUNDER!” Ariel said in a hurt tone. “That's not nice! He's just like you and me” Ariel said playfully hitting flounder. “Sorry” Flounder said grinning. Ariel swam over and looked at the creatures face. It was covered with some sort of glass. Funny, Ariel thought to herself, I thought only humans use glass? Ariel saw that there were bubbles coming out of the mask and noticed he was breathing. Ariel reached out to take off the mask and was startled when he started to open his eyes. ps thanks for the comments and welcome to my story kpmelody its nice to see someone else reading and (for once) Reviewing my stories. pss i think its fair to say at the moment i RULE the atlantican public library
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Post by danielle1982 on Feb 10, 2011 18:44:08 GMT -5
great story. i was just wondering are you going to finish the ariel and eric story
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Post by daytripper on Feb 10, 2011 18:55:09 GMT -5
yes i will finish the ariel and eric story
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Post by danielle1982 on Feb 10, 2011 20:24:31 GMT -5
are you writing the next chapters to the story and when will they be up. i was just wondering because i havent seen the next chapter up yet since the swim chapter.
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Post by Ariel on Feb 10, 2011 20:59:02 GMT -5
Flounder is funny :)I love it please keep going!
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Post by daytripper on Feb 10, 2011 21:31:09 GMT -5
are you writing the next chapters to the story and when will they be up. i was just wondering because i havent seen the next chapter up yet since the swim chapter. look im so so so so sorry ive been getting less interested in the two other stories ( finding it hard to continue) but also because im moving :D i dont have school tommorow but im helping move so i wont post anything up tommorow but ill try but i will and post new chapters to each story
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Post by josh89 on Feb 12, 2011 13:58:46 GMT -5
amazing please continue
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Post by daytripper on Feb 14, 2011 23:54:42 GMT -5
Chapter 3
Who Are YOU!
At first Marty didn't know what was going on or that he was underwater. But after he saw flounder he started t flip out but seeing that he was cornered he just gave up and let whatever was going to happen happen.
“Are you okay?” Ariel asked in a sweet voice. She was deeply concerned for the creature and wanted to make sure it wasn't lost and was okay.
“I-I-I'm fine” Marty said. He was not fine though Nooooo! Far from it he was scared for his life btu at the same time he was petrified by this girls beauty.
“Where did you come from?” Ariel asked curious as to what part of the ocean he came from.
“The The The The...” Marty started.
“The reef?” Ariel interjected. She knew that the reef was full of weird and unusual creatures but she had never seen anything like this before.
Marty shook his head.
“No” Marty said pointing up at the surface. Ariel was now confused as to what this meant. She knew for a fact that no creatures on and looked like him.
“The surface?” Ariel asked slowly.
“ARIEL!!!!!” Flounder screamed before Marty could answer. Ariel turned to see a great white shark heading straight towards them.
“EVERY FISH FOR THEMSELVES!” Flounder screamed as he swam by them.
“OH NO come on follow me” Ariel said grabbing my hand and pulling me away from the shark.
“Relax it wont hurt you” Marty said with a smile. “I would know, I study sharks and their behaviors” Marty said.
“Don't be stupid sharks eat everything and anything” Ariel said pulling me out of the way just as the shark chomped down right where Marty once stood. Marty gulped and soon was panicking again.
“Time to go” Marty said in a shaky and uneasy voice before swimming as fast as he possibly could. Unfortunately for him he was no sea creature and thus couldn't out swim the shark even if he was an Olympic swimmer. But fortunately for him Ariel COULD out swim a shark. Seeing that he was in trouble Ariel grabbed Marty's hand and swam as fast as she could.
After weaving in and out of canyons, coral reefs, caves, and seaweed forests they were finally safe. Coincidentally they found themselves at the entrance to Ariel's old grotto.
“I haven't been here in a while” Ariel said to herself swimming over to the rock covering the entrance.
“Whats in here?” Marty asked swimming over to her to help her move the rock out of the way.
“My human treasures” Ariel said with a wide smile. Treasure? Marty thought to himself. Moving the rock out of the way the three of them made their way into the cave. Marty was excited... until he saw her definition of “Treasure”. It was nothing but ordinary human things and there was a pile of broken human things in the corner of the cave.
“Check it out I bet you've never seen this before!” Ariel said excitedly as she turned around to show him a book.
“A book?” Marty asked confused. It finally hit him. SHE THINKS IM A FISH! Marty thought to himself. Until now he had assumed that she had known he was a human.
“How did you know?” Ariel asked confused and disappointed that she didn't surprise him.
“OH... um... I … study humans a lot” Marty said with a grin. “How?” Ariel asked.
“I just... watch them I guess?” Marty said at a loss for words. What does she mean how?
“Oh” Ariel said turning away and examining her book. Marty happened to glance at the title of the book and was surprised.
“May I see that book?” Marty asked.
“Of course” Ariel said with a smile handing him the book. Marty examined the the cover and smiled. Hans Christian Andersen's book of Fairy tales. Marty smiled at the irony and opened up the book. He scrolled through the pages until he found what he was looking for.
“Can you read human words?” Marty asked.
“Why yes I can” Ariel replied with a smile.
“Well then have you read this story?” He asked showing her the page with the-little-mermaid.
“Yes I have” Ariel said in a sad voice.
“Whats wrong?” Marty asked concerned.
“Nothing its just... nothing” Ariel said shaking her head and smiling again. “Come on lets go” Ariel said grabbing him by the wrist.
“Where?” Marty asked.
“Where else? ...Atlantica!” Ariel said with a laugh.
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Post by daytripper on Feb 15, 2011 17:41:23 GMT -5
please comment and review or else i wont try and post more tonight
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Post by Ariel on Feb 15, 2011 18:33:18 GMT -5
You are doing great.I love it
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Post by josh89 on Feb 16, 2011 1:31:47 GMT -5
GREAT WORK !
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Post by daytripper on Feb 16, 2011 21:44:37 GMT -5
Chapter 4
home sweet home
Marty swam alongside Ariel who was swimming slowly to let Marty keep up. They swam past amazing sights and Marty kept stopping to gape at the amazing things he saw. Ariel got suspicious at the way he was acting and took note of the fact he acted like he had never been in the sea before.
“Marty?” Ariel asked. “Where are you from?... For real?” Ariel said crossing her arms and staring him down. There was no way she was going to let this weird creature into Atlantic if it was going to hurt people. Normally she would be fine with it but not with him... he was acting too strange.
“Uh... I'm from... uhhh” Marty had to think fast he didn't want to scare her away or have her attack him.
“I'm waiting” Ariel said tapping her finger on her arm. Flounder floated behind Ariel with his fins crossed and an annoyed look on his face.
“I don't remember” Marty tried. Maybe just maybe shell believe me. “You don't think you can lie to me and get away with it. Do you?” Ariel said with a smile. She swam over to Marty and circled him. “Come on PLEASE tell me where your from?” Ariel said with a cute face. Marty sighed and took a deep breath.
“I'm- I'm...” Marty's heart was pounding and he felt like he should tel the truth.
“ARIEL!” a loud voice said behind him. Marty spun around and looked at a huge merman with a gold... trident? Marty fainted.
Hours later Marty woke up inside a … room? Oh no. he thought remembering what happened earlier. But wait how did I end up here? And where is here? Marty got up and checked to make sure his rebreather was working properly.
“The boys back home will never believe this one!” Marty said to himself as he got up from the bed which was made of what looked like sponge.
“Amazing” Marty said under his breath. Little did he know a little red headed mermaid was watching him as he explored his new room.
Marty looked all around and marveled at the room puzzled as to what it made of.
“I wish I had my camera with me” Marty said with a sigh. He knew that he would probably never see this place again. Also he wanted to brag to his friends and finally prove the existence of mermaids to the world.
“Whats a camera?” Ariel said swimming into the room. She had heard enough and wanted answers. She swam over right in front of him and crossed her arms again.
“d*****!” Marty said pounding his fist through the water... He was caught.
“Listen tell me where your from and I promise I wont tell daddy” Ariel said.
“Fine” Marty said. He wasn't scared anymore... he was frustrated. He wanted to keep his identity a secret but the jig was up.
“I'm human” Marty said with a half smile waiting for her to scream or call her “daddy”.
“I knew there was something unfishy about you!” Ariel said excitedly. “But how are you breathing underwater?” Ariel asked confused.
“Its a little invention of mine I was testing it out today when I met you” Marty said.
“Can I see it?” Ariel asked excitedly.
“Sorry but no I need it to BREATHE” He said putting a special emphasis on breathe.
“Oh right sorry” Ariel said blushing at her foolishness.
“Come on lets talk somewhere else somewhere... private” Ariel said motioning for him to follow as she swam out the window.
“Where are we going?” Marty said as he swam after her.
“My secret grotto” Ariel replied.
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 16, 2011 23:59:41 GMT -5
I think your story is going to be relay good, and I can't wait to read more. please right more soon.
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Post by daytripper on Feb 17, 2011 1:06:23 GMT -5
I think your story is going to be relay good, and I can't wait to read more. please right more soon. wheres the like button on this forum? =D
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Post by daytripper on Feb 17, 2011 18:32:21 GMT -5
please review you guys say you like the story but dont tell me what you like, dislike, and what you want to see improved
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