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Post by ariel7angel on Jan 26, 2007 11:22:43 GMT -5
WHile Ariel was telling the story, they had the watchful eyes on them, Trick & Ryan were watching from afar but couldnt hear a word they were saying.
"I wonder what they are talking about, i havent seen Shie talked in like an hour, that is so not like her - it must be some kind of story but what?" Ryan was trying to ask himself and his friend Trick.
"I have no idea, but whatever it is im going to find out" Trick said with a evil smile on his face.
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"Ariel are you ok" Shie asked her friend
"Yeah im fine, im just sad because i wish it could have worked out for them, like it did for us" Ariel said as she wiped her face of her tears
"IM sorry, we could stop if it makes you too sad"
"OH no, if i dont finish this story i know you will go crazy" Ariel said with a smile
"Ok, fine then please go on" SHie said also with a smile while hugging her best friend.
"Ok where was i - oh yes almost done - well the mermaids swam as fast as their tails would take them, and got back to the princess who was still talking to the prince, and told her everything that happen, then in return she told the prince, he couldnt say anything - all he did for the first time in his life is sat there and cried."
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Post by Kimberly on Jan 27, 2007 9:45:46 GMT -5
wow Ariel's story realy hits you whare it herts dosen't it? I love the story and enjoy reading it Please right more. Thanx!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Jan 28, 2007 23:12:31 GMT -5
Meanwhile Ariel was telling her story to Shie, Eric was out on business in the middle of the sea, he had to see someone very important who could help him make Ariel feel better, but who was he seeing and why.
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Now Shie had tears in her eyes also.
"That is terrible, how could those men be so cruel" Shie asked her friend.
"I have no idea, i know my Eric would do nothing like that or his men for that matter."
"Can you just finish the story, so we can all stop being sad and have a wonderful day" FLounder said out of nowhere.
The two girls had almost forgot that he was still there.
"Oh sorry Flounder, ok, i will finish the story so we can stop talking about sad things and enjoy the rest of our day together" Ariel said to both of her friends.
"That sounds great, then maybe we can go swimming or something" Shie said
Ariel smiled but it kind of made her sad because when she was in the water she always missed her tail so much. But she told herself to forget about it and just finish the story.
"As i was saying the Prince was crying, the princess was trying to ask him all kind of questions but he wouldnt listen, he just kept crying until - she screamed "stop, and listen to me" with that he didnt stop crying but he listen to her, she said "now if there is anything you can think of that we can do to help our mermaid friend, we will do it to save her". The prince didnt think that he could save her but maybe he could, then all of the sudden he though of the perfect plan. He finally answered the mermaid princess "how many mermaids do you have to work with?"
"Lots dont worry, if we need more - i can get as many as we need, what is your plan" She answed him, he replied with this "well the men want INdika because the world has never seen a real mermaid before and it will make the rich & famous, well what if they could get more, and more mermaids, they would so go for it and leave her unwatched." The mermaid princess knew just what he was saying before he finished - "oh i see we have lots of mermaids distract the men, and then while they are trying to capture more of our kind, other mermaids do what they can to free INdika, it is a great plan - but just one thing, how do we make sure none of the other girls get captured?" He knew what to say without even thinking "This will be our game, we will play treats on them, you girls are great at that." The prince replied "yes we are" So they talked about it more, and came up with a plan to get their girl back before they killed her.
They would work at night, because everything is better in the dark, but it was the morning now, and they had to do something before they killed her, so some of the mermaids went to the part that she was beening held, and sang their songs - they stayed out of sight until nightfall but it scaried the sailors and they wanted to wait til the darkest part of the night to kill the mermaid, so if there were other mermaids out there, they wouldnt see it as well."
"Oh yes, so maybe she wont die in the end - and it can become a happy story" Shie said to her friend.
"Well i dont know about that" Ariel said looking out to the sea.
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Post by Kimberly on Jan 29, 2007 13:24:01 GMT -5
I love reading your story it gives me something to look forward to at the end of my long days. And you really know how to keep me on my toes every time I think I know whats going to happen theres a twist that throes me off track and makes me wounder whats going to happen next. Please keep it coming. O and Lauren thanks again for livening up my day!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 1, 2007 19:29:32 GMT -5
"During the whole day, the mermaids never stop singing - it was making the sailors go insane, then some of them started thinking if we kill one of the mermaids, wont that make all the other mermaids mad and they will come after them in the night, so they all thought they shouldnt kill her anymore, but the captain was looking at a different way, he said to his men that if they kill the mermaid that will send a message to all the other mermaids to stay away.
The mermaids thought that would get to the sailors, and it was working but the captain was too strong for that, as the sun was going down all the girls knew what they had to do to free Indika"
"Wow this is really getting good, i thought for awhile that is was almost over, but i was so wrong" Shie said to her friend that was putting her feet in the ocean.
"YEah it is a very long story, im sorry" Ariel said back to her friend.
"Oh dont worry, i love it" Shie said with a big smile on her face, more than anything Shie love to hear stories about Ariel and her under water world.
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 1, 2007 19:48:12 GMT -5
In the middle of the ocean not far from Ariel's old castle set Eric's boat, he was waiting for someone important to talk to about Ariel and how she was sad about leaving her underwater world.
Eric was just walking around on the deck, when he heard a big splash, and as he looked over the edge and into the water, it looks like the water was exploding and then there he was, the man Eric had waited all afternoon for, King Triton!!!
"YOu wanted to see me Prince Eric, is Ariel ok?" Triton asked his newest member to his family.
"She is fine, but i think she misses her undersea world, i find her lots looking out to the sea, and just the other day she said that she missed her tail." Eric told his new father-in-law.
"Well that is very understandable - she was a mermaid her own life, and now she is a human." Triton said
"I know but i hate to see my princess so unhappy, i was thinking if i came to see you maybe you could do something that would help her."
"Does she know that you are speaking to me today" Triton asked Eric
"NO, she thinks im on business - she is having a girls day with her new best friend and my life long friend Shie, i didnt wanted her to know that i was speaking to you unless i had some good news to surprise her with." Eric said back to Triton
"So she misses her tail that much?" Triton asked
"Yes, Sir"
"Well she cant be a mermaid again because then she wont be with you!"
"I know that, but i was thinking maybe you could turn her into a mermaid for just like a month, like for a vacation and i could come to" ERic replied back to him.
"But if i turn you both in the merpeople then your kingdom will not have their prince or princess." Triton said which worried him.
"That is ok, i can have someone watch over our kingdom and can alert me if anything may go wrong."
"You really want to make her happy, dont you?"
"She is everything to me, i love her more than life it self, i would do anything to make her happy." ERic said with so much love in his eyes.
"Well maybe i will be able to do something for you after all" Triton said with a smile on his face.
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Tell me what you think - i hope you like both of my new post!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 2, 2007 17:00:28 GMT -5
Yes I love your new post. As you know I realy enjoy reading your story. Ariel is going to go crazy with excitement when Eric tells her. I can't wate to fined out what is going to happen to Indika and see what Ariel thinks about Eric's suprize.
Thank you Lauren
your TLM friend Jared
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 2, 2007 21:40:53 GMT -5
"Im glad you like my story so much, Shie. But lets see if i can finish this story before night fall." Ariel said to her friend, all her friend could do was laugh.
"As nightfall came upon them, the mermaids knew what they had to do, the sailors wanted to kill the little mermaid now but the captain wanted to the wait til the deepest dark of night, so the mermaids wouldnt know that she was dead til morning.
When the sun finally took its evening nap in the ocean, the mermaids came out of hiding but instead of singing their sad songs like they had done all day, they were playing above the ocean, like most of them had never done and singing happy songs, soon enough the captain heard them and sent some of his men to go see what it was. When the men called back "more mermaids, more mermaids" all the captain heard was "more money, more money", so he sent the rest of his men to go capture them all.
When the sailors yelled that they could not catch them, the captain told the one sailor, that he left behind to watch the lonely mermaid as he walked away, "if you want something done right, you have to do it yourself". After the captain was out of sight, another mermaid came out of hiding and sang "young sailor come to me, young sailor come to me" to the deserted sailor, he knew he shouldnt but he was drawn to her voice, so he left the mermaid to go find the mystery girl. THe plan had worked, finally they could free Indika.
Meanwhile the other mermaids were having so much fun, making the sailors run every other way and some were even jumping in the water to try to get them, the mermaids were laughing and playing that they didnt even realize that the men were about to giving up, until the mermaid princess came out of nowhere, and let the men almost catch her to give the other mermaids more time to free their mermaid friend."
"Wow those mermaids really know how to work together" Shie said with a big smile on her face, she couldnt wait to hear what happen next, she was almost about to fall over because she was so excite.
"Yeah we are really a big family under the water." Ariel said with a smile on her face, but kind of sad because she missed her big family under the sea. But once she stop thinking about that, she started to finish her story.
"Back to where INdika was, now all they had to do was free her from the net, it was fasten to one of the docks, so one of the mermaids that was really good at jumping out of water, leaped as high as she had ever been and landed on the dock, she had brought a shell with her so she could cut her free, other mermaids were under the net so it wouldnt splash and the sailors wouldnt come running when they heard it.
She cut through the net and Indika came falling towards the mermaids, who had their hands and even some had their tails up so she wouldnt make a noise when she hit the water, once they had her under the sea, they took their shells and started cutting through the the net until they had a hole big enough for her to swim through. Once she was free she was so greatful but they told her that she had to swim far away and never come back, and they would meet her soon, she was very sad to leave her prince but she knew it was for the best. ONce she was out of sight, they sang a song only us mermaids know about to let the others know that she had escaped, so they would all go back under the sea never to return to Mermaid Island again."
"Wait what happen to the prince, oh no i promise i wouldnt ask anymore questions, im sorry Ariel" Shie said with a sad look.
"Its ok, im almost done."
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I hope you all like it, i had to write it twice, the first time i was almost done with the post my computer just turned off for no reason, so its a little different then the first but i hope you all still like it, and Jared i hope you like it also!!!
Comment please!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 3, 2007 17:00:48 GMT -5
I glad they free'd Indika and I would ask the same questions what happened to the prince? Its realy good you have a real tallent for story telling. Where did you get the idea for this story enyway. when you finish this one I hope you will right anther one. This story would make a good book if you like I will put it in ms word and e-mail it to you when your done wighting it so you will have your book to read to your family when ever you want complet with title page. PM me what you think about that idea.
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 3, 2007 18:46:09 GMT -5
I glad they free'd Indika and I would ask the same questions what happened to the prince? Its realy good you have a real tallent for story telling. Where did you get the idea for this story enyway. when you finish this one I hope you will right anther one. This story would make a good book if you like I will put it in ms word and e-mail it to you when your done wighting it so you will have your book to read to your family when ever you want complet with title page. PM me what you think about that idea. IM glad that you like it so much Jared, it looks like you are the only one but im also writing it for myself - so i can say i did it. I dont know where i got the idea - it just came to me, i never thought of myself as a good story teller but i guess there is a first time for everything, thank you for the book idea - that is a really good idea but i have it saved in Word myself, b/c i wouldnt want to lose it if something ever happen to the forum, you never know!!!!! But i should put it in a book when i finish it would be nice to have for myself!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 3, 2007 19:10:35 GMT -5
this site is worldwide so I'm sher that you and I are not the only ones enjoying your story they just not postting to say how much they are enjoying it.
SO IF YOU ARE READING THIS MAKE A POST SO LAUREN KNOWS HOW MUCH YOU LOVE HER STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
there mabe that will help. Even if we are the only two that just means that people don't know what they are missing:( But I love it please keep righting more I just can't get anuff:)
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 3, 2007 22:13:57 GMT -5
“Ok, I promise I will be quiet for the rest of the story.” Shie said to Ariel as she was about to finish her story. “Ok, as the mermaids returned back under the sea, the sailors were very confused, but they knew that they had one mermaid that wasn’t going anywhere, as they walked back to the other side of the island, they saw the sailor that they had left behind to watch the strange mermaid walking around, the captain asked him “why aren’t you at your post” but the sailor said nothing, “answer me” the captain yelled at the sailor. Finally the sailor said “did you heard the voice” the captain knew that he too had been tricked by the mermaids, he ran pass the sailor only to see that the net was in the water and had no mermaid in it. As the mermaids were swimming, they knew they had to get word to the prince fast because they knew the men would come looking for him after they found the net empty, and they didn’t want to be around much longer. All the other mermaids swam down below where no human would be able to follow them to find their friend they had just freed, as for the mermaid princess she went to the boat to let the prince know that his love had got away. When the prince heard of this good news, he was happier than he could ever be, but he knew that his men would come for him soon, so he had to hide his excitement – so they wouldn’t know that he helped her escape. He told the princess to never return, and never let any of her people come to the surface here again, because he knew it was not safe. If he could he would try to see his bride to be, but he knew deep down that he would never see her again. Just as the prince and mermaids had thought, the men came looking for him – they found him right where they had left him, and the captain asked him if he knew anything about the mermaid being free, and the prince said this “what are you talking about, I have been locked up here all this time – how could I have anything to do with this”. The captain knew very well that he couldn’t kill the prince because his father the king would come looking for him, but he said this “if you ever see your precious mermaid again – I will kill her, and make you watch this time”. The prince knew that he was telling the truth, so even though it broke his heart, he knew he could never see INdika again. The prince didn’t want Indika coming to the surface again to try to find him, or she surely would be capture and killed this time. The mermaid princess had told him before she left for her under sea castle, if he talks into a pink shell, then kisses it and throws it in the sea as he is saying her name that it will get to his love. So he found the pretties pink shell he could find, and told his mermaid that he loved her very much, and that he would never stop loving her but that they couldn’t be together, because the men who got her once would kill her if they saw her with him again. He also added that he would never marry because in his heart his wife was in the sea, he kissed it and threw it as hard as he could into the deep blue while saying her name over and over again. Indika was at the bottom of the sea when the shell magically appeared in her hand, she knew it was from him before she even putted it up to her ear, as she heard the words of her love – she started to cry but she knew that he loved her and that he was doing it for her life, she promise herself that she would never go to him but she always kept the shell to hear his voice from time to time, and even though she knew it was dangerous she kept watch over him. And he kept to his word, he never did marry and neither did she. The end” “Wow that was sad, very different then how your story work out.” Shie said as she wiped a tear away from her cheek. “Yes Indika was not as lucky as I was, but she knew that she was loved and that was all the matter” Ariel as she took wiped a tear from her eye. “Very good story, now I understand that if I was a mermaid I would never go anywhere near that island” “Legend says they still fish for mermaids to this day, but who knows if that is true.” Ariel said as she stood up to splash some water at Shie to change the mood a little bit, it was a sunny day and they shouldn’t be sad they should be happy. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Finally im done with Ariel's story but dont think my story is done - no no no, there is much more to be told. Please comment!!!! And thank you Jared for saying all those kind words, you are the best, and by far the best reading i have!!!!!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 4, 2007 14:51:30 GMT -5
thank you. I hope it helps evryone should get a chance to read and love this story as much as I do. So what do you thingk about what I added under my banner? Ariel's story did have a sad ending. But Eric's news should liven up the day. Can't wate to see what happens next.
jared
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 4, 2007 15:44:59 GMT -5
I love what you put under your banner - that is so nice Jared - thank you so much!!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 4, 2007 17:53:11 GMT -5
thank you Lauren, I hope it will help bring people here to read your story. I just got an idea look at my banner now and tell me what you think of that. That should get peoples attention, don't you think?
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 4, 2007 22:38:50 GMT -5
YEah i think so, i love pink - it is my favorite color!!!!!! YOu are the best!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 5, 2007 9:01:42 GMT -5
Its my favorite to but most men wont etmit that they like a girly color but I don't care if who knows that my favorite color is pink. well I look forwerd to reading more but I need to work on AMC's pic's.
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 10, 2007 23:28:58 GMT -5
He hadn’t heard much about Ariel’s story but he heard that, and he did know it was true because at one time he also fished for mermaids, how would she know that – that is what he had to find out, as he thought to himself as the two girls got up and started walking his way, he had to get out of there before they say him.
“So what do you want to do now?” Ariel asked her best friend on land.
“We could go swimming” but that didn’t seem to make Ariel happy “or something – like just enjoy the day” Shie said to her friend as she took her hand.
“I would love to go swimming, I just miss my family and friends so much, that when I get in the water – I miss them even more, im sorry Shie” Ariel said back
“Its ok, like I said we can just hang out and do girl things” Shie said with a smile on her face, I mean she wasn’t the girliest of girls, but she like to do some girls stuff once in awhile.
“What do you mean “girl” stuff?” Ariel looked confused
“You know, get your hair done, paint your toes and fingers nails – girly stuff” Shie was trying to explain it as best as she could but she herself didn’t really know what it meant either. Ariel kind of got a smile on her face, but then shook her head no.
“My sisters used to do all those things, well except for the toes of course, but I was never in to that” Ariel said as she was thinking of what they could do, Shie was about to say something when Ariel said “I know we can go explore, I was always doing that under the sea, and I really haven’t had anytime to do it since I have had legs” As she looked at Shie to see what she thought of the idea.
“That sounds like a great idea, lets go” Shie said
Then the two best friends walked off together to find their next big adventure.
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i KNOW its a little small but i have been working lots and my brain is going crazy, i will write more soon - please comment!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 11, 2007 8:04:11 GMT -5
was it tricks that fished for mermaids? Well I hope more people are reading your story now. can't wate to read more thanx Lauren.
Jared
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 17, 2007 16:15:46 GMT -5
I'm going to do something to try to get people back here and reading you'll see what I'm talking about if you look in TLM pic's!!!!
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