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Post by grablegal on Feb 18, 2007 2:56:34 GMT -5
Hi Lauren, I just wanted to let you know that I finally got to read your wonderful story. I read some before, but stopped for awhile because my computer was giving me problems. Well it is working again. Anyway I just wanted to let you know that the story is a joy to read.
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Post by TreasuresUntold on Feb 21, 2007 17:21:33 GMT -5
I have been reading this story since you first started writing it and never got around to commenting. Just wanted to say I love it!!! I always look forward to see whats going to happen next. Keep up the great work!
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Post by Kimberly on Feb 23, 2007 7:50:48 GMT -5
see Lauren I toled you that we were not the only ones reading your tread.
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Post by ariel7angel on Feb 23, 2007 11:27:17 GMT -5
see Lauren I toled you that we were not the only ones reading your tread. YEah IM so glad!!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on Mar 1, 2007 11:40:13 GMT -5
How is it coming? can't wait to see what happens next.
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Post by ariel7angel on Mar 7, 2007 9:59:38 GMT -5
Sorry guys - i havent wrote anything is forever, but i work this morning, and i have the night off, so im really going to try to write something tonight!!!!!
Thanks for reading my fanfic everyone!!!!
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Post by miklc on Mar 7, 2007 13:37:59 GMT -5
Hi Lauren, Well it's been an awful while since I posted comments on your story, but I was finally able to read it from where I last left it, and I have to say WOW. It is really good, I loved Ariel's story though it was very sad at the ending and I carn't wait to see what happens with Ariel going back under the sea (BTW I am currently writing a FanFic of my own and Eric is going to become a merman in mine aswell! I guess great minds think alike lol) Ariel will be so happy, I wonder if Shie will get to go lol. Just want to say I LOVE it and write more soon because I want to know what's happening next, well done
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Post by ariel7angel on Mar 7, 2007 22:02:29 GMT -5
WHile Ariel & Shie were off exploring, Eric was returning from his important meeting with the king, when Trick saw him get off his boat. Trick thought to himself, now where could he have gone being back so soon, the nearest land from here that he would have business on was hours away, there was no way he could have got back so early.
As the Prince walked off the boat, Trick hid behind a crate that was going to be loaded on to the boat soon, Eric could not see him but Trick could such hear him.
"Ariel is going to be so surpise, i know how much she misses her family" Eric said to one of the only other people who knows who Ariel really is - Grimsby, as the old man met him at the dock.
Trick thought to himself that he could finally find out where their new Princess was from, they must be going to her home land for awhile, all he would have to do was follow. What a great plan he thought to himself. But he didnt know that wasnt going to be as easy as it sounded.
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I know it is very short but for some reason i just cant write right now, any ideas would help - comment please
THank you miklc - for your nice comments!!!!
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Post by miklc on Mar 8, 2007 15:14:19 GMT -5
This is great in this short extract you've already added more suspense!!! Oh ideas hrm.... sorry I carn't really think of any at the mo
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Post by Kimberly on Mar 8, 2007 16:57:11 GMT -5
This is great in this short extract you've already added more suspense!!! Oh ideas hrm.... sorry I carn't really think of any at the mo if tricks wonts to know hare Ariel is form lut him see first hand should he get hit by mistake when Ariel and Eric are ternd into merfoke. What do you think Lauren? Love it please right more soon.
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Post by Kimberly on Mar 31, 2007 14:06:18 GMT -5
What happened did you get righters block, or have just been bizzy? Well win you get a chance to right more I know evryone will love it. I'm looking forward to seeing what you come up with.
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Post by dreamer on Mar 31, 2007 22:22:04 GMT -5
I agree with kimpossible, everyone (myself included) CANNOT wait for the next part.
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Post by kelsi on Apr 2, 2007 6:16:22 GMT -5
sorry for the late comment, but anyway, i read all the chapters of your story and all of them are great..
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Post by ariel7angel on Apr 7, 2007 23:04:42 GMT -5
Sorry guys i have been so busy, i got a second job, and im working both right now, soon i will only have one, but later this week i go to NY for a wedding, when i get back - i will try to write some more!!!!
Sorry again!!!!
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Post by dreamer on Apr 11, 2007 23:24:21 GMT -5
Great to hear from you again! Have fun at the wedding. n_n
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Post by ariel7angel on May 1, 2007 9:09:24 GMT -5
Sorry guys i have been thinking of some ideas, and if i dont get home to llate tonight i will try to write something - believe me the story is far from being over, i just had to take a break that is all!!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on May 2, 2007 17:42:22 GMT -5
Ariel and Shie were just coming back from finding the most beautiful rocks “They kind of sparkle like shells do when the sun hits them” Ariel said.
“I know, aren’t they beautiful, I just love the purple ones” Shie answered back, they were so involved about talking about the rocks and looking at them, that they both walked right by Eric who was there to greet them.
“I never knew rocks could shine like that” Ariel was saying while Eric was trying to get their attention, but he was having no luck.
“Yeah some rocks have crystals in them”
“So that is the clear shiny part inside?” Ariel asked as she point to the beautiful purple clear part of the rock, she couldn’t wait to put them up on the shelf with all of her other human treasures.
“Yes they are called” but Eric had finally caught up to them “girls, girls wait for me” As they both turn around to see Eric runny after them, finally he had got their attention as he stop to take a breath before he started talking to them. “How was your girl day?”
“OH it was great, we had the most wonderful lunch and talk by the sea, and we even found these really beautiful rocks with, what you call them?” Ariel asked Shie
“Crystals”
“OH yeah crystals inside them” Ariel said with a huge smile on her face.
“What did you do today?” Shie asked Eric as she saw that they were still taking stuff off the boat, so he must have been on it.
“Well I went to go talk to someone very important, but lets go inside you never know who could be listening” Eric said as he put his arms around the girls as they walked inside their castle.
“Rats” said Trick to himself, how would they know to go inside, did Eric see him, he thought to himself or maybe their secret was way more important than he thought.
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Sound it took me so long to write more, i just have been so busy - i hope you like it please comment, i will try to write more soon!!!!
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Post by Kimberly on May 3, 2007 22:45:50 GMT -5
thats good Lauren. as always I love reading your story pleases don't stop righting. and as always I am looking forwerd to reading more.
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Post by dreamer on May 6, 2007 13:51:24 GMT -5
Thanks for the addition!
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Post by ariel7angel on Jun 24, 2007 22:58:25 GMT -5
hey guys sorry i havent wrote anything in awhile but i just moved from Orlando to GA - b/c my boyfriend broke up with me - but im staying with my stepmom for right now until i figure out what im doing and til i get my own place, and i dont have my own computer too - which sucks, but i promise right after all this stuff is over and i get my own place i will write something - thanks everyone who has read my story so far and i hope you come back when i start up again!!!!!
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