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Post by ariel7angel on Sept 27, 2006 12:53:24 GMT -5
It was a month after the wedding - and Ariel was loving everything do to with be marry to Eric except for one thing,looking out the window to the sea below.
Eric walked in and noticed Ariel not being her cheerful self and said "Honey what is wrong"
"Oh nothing, Eric dont worry about it, im just thinking" she signed.
But Eric knew better, and kept trying to get it out of her "Honey, please tell me - even if you think it is stupid it isnt to me"
"Ok, well promise me you wont get mad" She said
"Ariel i can never get mad at you, i love you" He said with love in heart.
"Well, now that im a human - i really miss the sea and my family and of course Flounder, but i really cant do anything about it - so dont worry about it" Still upset
"If you like we could go swimming in the sea and invite everyone to come and join us" Eric was trying to figure out any way to make his new bride happy, she was the world for him and he would do anything to make her smile.
"Well i guess that would be fun" But thinking not really.
"Ariel you cant fool me, i know you - that is not what you want, what is it - tell me and i will do everything i can to make it happen" Eric trying everything he knew.
She signs and it trying to think of what would make her really happy, well the sea she thinks but then she realized i really miss being a mermaid, oh wow she thought to herself all that time I was a mermaid who wanted to be a girl and now that I got my wish, I want to be a mermaid again - but she couldnt never leave the love of her life, so that is way out of the question.
"What are you thinking, tell me please" Eric waiting to see what she came up with, because he hated to see her blue.
"Well i guess what i really miss is not just the sea, my family and friends, but what i miss most of all is being a mermaid" Waiting to see what he would say.
"Really, are you sure you havent been a human girl your whole life because every girl wants what she cant have or what she used to" Laughing
"So you are not mad???" Ariel hoping that he would say no.
"Of course not, you have only been a human for a month now, and you were a mermaid your whole life before that, of course you are going to miss it" Thinking to himself wow i love this girl more than anything, even if it meant going under the sea for her.
"But what can i do about it, i cant get it out of my head - i try swimming in the sea but it just not the same, and i miss my tail even more when i do that, please Eric you have to help me" Ariel not knowing what to do, she cant sleep, eat or think about anything else, she just doesnt know what to do anymore and she hoping that Eric can think of something before she goes crazy!!!!
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Well this is the first thing i have really wrote in a long time, i dont really like writing that much except for poems in stuff, so what do you all think so far - i would write more but i have to work later today and i have to take a stupid test that i was suppose to take on Monday and it is trying me crazy, so i really cant think right now!!!! But later this evening when i get home, i will try to write more!!!!
Please leave comments, and tell me how you like it so far this is really only the begin, setting up for the story!!!!
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Post by scarletbubbles on Sept 27, 2006 16:36:04 GMT -5
That was cute, please continue.
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 2, 2006 14:22:23 GMT -5
Ok i have been thinking about this everyday - b/c i dont want it to be boring, and not a lot of people read it yet, so i hope maybe i will get some new reader and comment please - tell me what you like or dont and if you have any ideas too - anything will help!!!!!
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Grimsby came into the room, and told them "Your quests are arriving!!!!!"
"THank you, Grimsby we will be right out" Eric said worring about Ariel, and hoping that she will be ok for the party!!! It was the first party that they were having since she became human, and everyone in the kingdom would be meeting her for the first time, their future Queen!!!
"Are you going to be ok, honey" Eric hopely she would say yes!!!
"I will be fine, you know me - i always am in a good mood" Ariel saying it but not really believing it herself, which she knew Eric knew would know better. While she was walking out, not letting him say anything more, she just had to forget about wanting to be a mermaid again - next week she wouldnt even be thinking that anymore - yeah she told herself, it was just something she missed but she loved being a human!!!!!
Eric walked up behind her, and gave her a kiss on the neck, and held her hand, "IF we are together, we can get thru anything" he whisper in her ear, and it made her smile, because he was right - with Eric she could do anything - if she wanted - she could fly!!!!
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I know it is really short but my brain is really not working today - i cant think of anything, so remember any ideas would really help me out!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 3, 2006 18:18:02 GMT -5
Walking down to the ballroom, Ariel was already feeling better - at least she gets to dance, and she had spend a couple of weeks learning how to do some really hard dances with Eric, and she couldnt wait to do them infront of others!!! "Are you ready"Eric asking his new bride, if she was ready to meet her new kingdom. "Ready as i ever will" Ariel couldnt wait to meet new people, she just love making new friends. "Ok, here we go" Eric walking her to the top of the stairs as Grimsby let their quests know that they were coming. "Princess Ariel ANd Prince Eric" Grimsby said loud and proud, as Ariel & Eric walked down the long stairs, everyone cheered to see their Prince so happy with his new Princess. Ariel couldnt look better than she looked tonight Eric thought to himself, she was wearing the beautiful pink dress she wore the first night that they met, and it just made him think how much he loved her and how he had felt in love with her that night, before he even knew!!!! She shine as much as she did that night - even around all these new people, but he knew she was feeling that great. Ariel was a little shy at first because she didnt know anybody, and everyone was coming up to her, and talking to her and wanted her to talk to them, but then she just looked over at Eric and he was staring at her with so much love in his heart, that she melted and felt all right again. Eric came over, and gave Ariel a kiss and said "Ok, ok, everyone off - this is the first time that she is all meeting you, let her have some air - you will all have time to talk to her in time" as everyone backed off a little - Eric took her hand, and as the music started they took the flour, and started to dance. Everyone watched with open eyes, wondering who this new beautiful red head was, where did she come from and why nobody has ever heard of her before now!!!! But then when they took the floor hand in hand, they could tell that their prince had finally found the woman of his dreams, and that was enought for the them, well at less for most of them. THere was at least one pair of eyes that never left Ariel, no matter where she was - they were there, wondering where this beauty came from and why they had never heard of her before - these eyes haunted her - and she could feel them. "Eric, you know when you can feel that someone is watching you" Ariel asking Eric - feeling uneasy for the first of the night since they had started dancing. "Yes of course, but everyone is watching - they are all wondering who you are, and why you are so beautiful - well i have been wondering that myself" Eric saying with a laugh "Oh stop it, but no really i feel one pair of eyes, and they havent left me since i walked in" Ariel looking around trying to find them, but couldnt. "Oh its ok, it just probable some guys who has the hots for you, and if i find him - i will kick him to the moon" Laughing again, but there was some truth to that, no one would ever take her away from him again - he fought way to hard for her, and she was going to be with him forever!!!! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well i thougth of somemore - my brian is mostly just on TLM so i thought i would write some more, please leave comments - i would love to hear what you all think!!!!!!
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Post by scarletbubbles on Oct 3, 2006 18:44:26 GMT -5
I'm glad to see you continuing, I think it's a good story. And ooo, mystery, who is watching her? This has a lot of potential - good mystery element. I really like it so far, please keep it up!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 3, 2006 20:08:31 GMT -5
I'm glad to see you continuing, I think it's a good story. And ooo, mystery, who is watching her? This has a lot of potential - good mystery element. I really like it so far, please keep it up! Well at least someone is reading it - i feel like nobody likes b/c nobody else is commecting on it but at least i have one loyal reading thanks - yeah i love reading about mystery - so i thought i would put some in, i just dont know if i can make it sound good later - but i will try, im learning about myself along the way!!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 3, 2006 21:35:08 GMT -5
Still worried, Ariel kept looking around while they were dancing until her eyes landed on her only friend except for Eric that was human.
"Shie, i didnt know you were coming" Ariel was so happy to see her.
"I know, i wanted to surpise you" Shie said right back while huging her new friend she just had made about week ago - but they have became friends right away.
Shie was an old school mate of Eric's, she was kind of the younger sister he never had, they have been best friends since she was 9, she is the only other person than Eric & Grimsby that knows she was really a mermaid - and it was going to stay that way.
"When did you get in" Ariel asked
"We just sailed in about an hour ago, i didnt know if i was going to make it, but i did - i bearly took a bath, but i think im smelling ok" Laughing, she looked great for just getting in a hour ago.
"Yeah i guess you smell ok" Ariel said back - laughing.
Shie was dressed in a teal sparkling evening gown, Shie was not much into ballgowns, she hated big and round, she was more into thin long dresses, and she knew Ariel would love her dress, because it was one of her favorite colors.
"Where did you get that beautiful teal dress, and when can i wear it" Ariel asked, she had never seen anything like it before, it reminded her so much of her tail.
"Oh Ryan brought it for me at the royal dress shop at Mermaid Island, lovely store - you would really like it Ariel, maybe next time we go, you and Eric should come with us." Shie hopely they would agree.
"You went to Mermaid Island, i have always wanted to go there - is it really true, is the island shaped like....." Before Ariel could finish, Eric said "So has the deadbeat of a boy asked your hand in marriage yet???"
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Post by scarletbubbles on Oct 4, 2006 15:51:49 GMT -5
Once again - I think it's cute and I like that element of mystery. I like that you threw some new characters into the mix! Very nice. I'll still say it again - definately keep going, and don't worry, because the more you practice at writing or anything else, the better you get at it!
Keep up the good work!
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Post by scarletbubbles on Oct 4, 2006 15:59:12 GMT -5
im learning about myself along the way!!!!! I totally know what you mean! When I first started writing my own stories, I learned so much about myself through the process of writing. You learn a lot about your own personality (and obviously your strenghths and weaknesses as a writer). The more you do it, the better you become, and you also become a little more adventurous w/ your writing - once you have a couple stories under your belt, you become curious about different moods and tones for your work (Just like an artist) I think that there really is something to be said about writing creatively, because no matter how many different things you write, you always learn something new about yourself when you sit down to complete that next chapter. So keep it up!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 5, 2006 0:37:40 GMT -5
Thanks Scarletbubbles - when i dont think i can write anymore - i read your comments, and i know i can go on - thank you so much, sometimes are you need is a little push to go a long way - i think i will write so more tomorrow, so watch out for more!!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 5, 2006 13:42:18 GMT -5
"Eric i was talking" Ariel turned around to give Eric a pieace of her mind, but he just looked at her with so much love in his eyes, that she couldnt get mad. "Im sorry honey, what were you saying" Eric said with his puppy eyes "Ok, what was i saying Shie" forgetting what she was talking about. "You were asking about mermaind island and if it was shaped like and then that is when your rude husband started talking, but i think you were going to say mermaind, right?? Asking Ariel if she was right "yes that is what i was talking about and yes that is what i was asking, so is it true, is it really shaped like a mermaid" Wanting to know so bad, because she has always her the league about it under the sea but no one had ever been there because it was a so dangerous for mermaids there, because like anywhere else they fished for mermaids, but bearly got any because of mermaids knowing. "Yes and no, it is not shaped like a mermaid with like a head and eveything but the tail yes, it was so amazing - but one thing i dont get is why you have never been there." Wondering why a mermaid had never been to mermaid island. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I was at the beach a while back, and i made this - now i can show all of you what Mermaid Island would look like if it was real - just think of water all around the tail. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I know i dont write that much in a post but if i do a little at a time, it is much easier for me to think of stuff, i mean when i started this story i wanted it one way, but everytime i write something new, it changes which i really like - but dont worried i will come back to tthe stuff in the begin - comment more please!!!!!!!!
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Post by scarletbubbles on Oct 5, 2006 14:52:02 GMT -5
I like the picture you added - it makes a great visual. And I think you should definately keep up the writing. I just don't get why more people aren't posting?
Well, I like it and think it has a lot of potential so please keep going.
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 5, 2006 20:28:55 GMT -5
"Well you see the league under the sea is" She was just about to start telling the story when she hear her name called
"Ariel, Ariel, Ariel......." from unknow face
"Do you hear that" Ariel was confused because no one else seem to hear it except her
"Hear what??" Shie said
"YEs dear, what are you talking about??" Eric added
"YOu dont hear someone calling my name over and over again."Ariel was thinking she was losing it, because nobody hear it except her
"NO" they both said
"Hmm, i dont understand why would i hear it as clear as day, and both of you dont." Ariel was very very confused - she thought maybe she was just hearing things.
"I dont know dear, maybe it was someone else name you heard and it just sounded like your, it happens to me all the time." Eric said
"Yeah i guess that was it, well back to my story but i dont want to say anything about it in here because i still feel someone watching me." Still worred about those eyes she didnt see.
"what are you talking about, Ariel." Shie asked, knowing that she didnt know the whole story.
"Oh i will tell you later, why dont we go out here so we can see the beautiful ocean" Ariel asked
"Ok, sounds nice." Shie answed
"WHy dont you girls go out there, i have already heard this story lots of time, im got business to talk with someone."
"Ok, honey - i love you." Ariel added before she and Shie walked outside hand in hand to have some girl time to themselves, leaving Eric alone but was soon joined by guy after they left.
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Post by Aquisha on Oct 5, 2006 21:53:38 GMT -5
Hey ariel7angel! I've been reading your story and I finally found some time to write a post. I love Shie's character! I always thought it would be really cool if Eric had a sister or sister-like character and I'm really excited to see how that evolves.
I'm really glad that you're getting the chance to write and I hope that you can write more soon!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 6, 2006 0:18:38 GMT -5
oh thank you aquisha - im glad that i have another reading, i only thought i had one - im glad you like Shie, isnt that a cool name, yeah i was trying to think of a girl that she could be friends with that was a friend of Eric's but not like a girlfriend or anything, so that is how i came up with Shie.
Thank for reading, your story and a few others on this site are the reason i started writing, so thanks.
And i hope you come back and read more!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 6, 2006 1:08:21 GMT -5
"Ok, ok we are all alone - now please tell me the story about Mermaid Island and what you were talking about someone eyes on you." Shie said way too exicted for Ariel's story.
"Ok, i will tell you about the unknown people - since we came in i had felt a pair of eyes on me, just one - i mean i know that everyone was looking at me because im their new princess but these eyes never and i mean never left me- i can still feel them, i was looking for the unknown person when i saw you." Ariel was done
"Well i bet it is just some guy who has the hots for you, i mean have you looked at yourself in the mirror before - you are one hot mama!!!!" Shie saying with a hug smile on her face.
"Thanks" giggling "That is what Eric says but i dont know" Ariel still feeling uneasy about it.
"Dont worry nobody is going to hurt you, between Eric and Me - you are cover, now tell me about this league about Mermaid Island" Waiting so much that she was jumping up and down now, and it was kind of funny because she had a very long dress on.
Ariel couldnt stop giggling at her friend who was making a fool out of yourself. "Ok, i will tell you if you stop acting like a wild animal"
"Deal" And with that she stoped, and they both look out at the beautiful ocean.
"Ok, long ago there was this island back then it wasnt called Mermaid Island like it is called today, it was just an unknown island. Well it had the best little coves all around it, so it started attracting all the mermaids because, if you were sailing by you couldnt see into them, so mermaids could hang out above the water but not be in fear of humans."
"But when did that all change" waiting to know more, before even Ariel got to that part.
"Hey are you going to listen, i will get to that part, hold on to your tail, i mean pants, dress oh whatever." Ariel had confused herself
"OK, go on" Shie couldnt stop laughing, Ariel was always using fish talk, she thought it was so funny, but Eric & Ariel knew that she couldnt do that around other people because humans dont talk like that.
"Ok, where was i, oh yes now i remember. Yes about the covers, well all the mermaid would swim around to find the best spots, and all of them started to notice something - that the island remind them of something - it had long curvy sides but then at the end, they would go in almost together on both sides, you could lay over the middle and have your head in water, and your tail in water but your middle on land and then after that there were all these little hills, that is what they are call it when the land goes up and down right?? Asking Shie if she was right because she still didnt know everyhthing to do with the human world.
"Yes, you got it right - very good, do go on" Still couldnt wait for more.
"Princess Ariel, we need you in the ballroom at once" Grimsby said whiling opening the door to let the two young ladys enter.
"I will tell you more after this"
"That is fine, i forgot that this was your party and some of the guests might want to talk to you."
"Its ok, i will see what they need and then we will finish talking about the story, i promise."
"Oh dont worry, its not like i cant hear it another time."
"I know, but i also know you - and once you hear the first of something, you can stop thinking about it, til you hear the rest."
Eric was coming to join Ariel right when she said that to Shie, and she looked back at her, like yeah you are so right - at that moment Ryan was right behind Eric, to join to them also.
"Honey i didnt think you were going to make it" Shie said to Ryan as he walked up to her to give her a kiss.
"I know im so sorry, everything took a lot longer than i thought it would."
"It is always that way, isnt it." KNowing that she was right.
"Oh yes, Hello Princess Ariel you look wonderful tonight, and Eric you not looking bad yourself." Taking Ariel's hand and giving it a kiss at the same time.
"Hello Ryan, how are you today, i just love the dress you got Shie - you know you got it for me too, because i am going to be stealing it all the time." Giggling whiling giving her friend a hug.
"Thanks Ryan, you dont look that bad either."
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So what do you all think, i know i wrote more than i usually do, any comments would help - thanks even any on the writing, i always need help on stuff like that. Well im off to bed - goodnight everyone, and thanks for reading.
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 6, 2006 12:09:05 GMT -5
Ryan with a smile on his face, gave his good friend a huge hug, then after that held out his hand for Shie so they could dance.
"We will talk later, Ariel ok - and please dont take to long because im dieing to hear what happens next" Saying to her best friend as she when to go dance with her man.
"What was that all about" Ryan wanting to know what the girls were talking about.
"Oh Ariel was just telling me a story about her home" Shie really couldnt tell him about the league about Mermaid Island, unlike her - he didnt know that Ariel was once a mermaid, the only reason they told her was because SHie has known Eric since she was 9, and Shie had just met Ryan about a year ago, not that they didnt trust him - it was just that they didnt want to tell someone that wasnt going to be around forever, she still didnt know about their relationship. Like before when Eric had her about marriage, and she didnt answer him - it was becasue he hadnt asked her yet, and most guys after seeing a woman that he loves for a year, ask for her hand in marriage.
BUt she made herself stop thinking about all the stuff, and just tryed to have fun with her man, while dancing in the middle of the floor, not soon after they started dancing that Ariel & Eric joined in. They danced to the rest of the song before she went to go make the rounds and talk to all her new people.
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I know it isnt much but that is all my brain can come up with, i hope you all like it - and please please please comment some more.
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Post by grablegal on Oct 6, 2006 13:47:41 GMT -5
I actually started reading this today. Very cute. I just love fanfictions about Ariel and Eric. Please continue writing this. I would love to see what happens. : )
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 6, 2006 13:57:00 GMT -5
I actually started reading this today. Very cute. I just love fanfictions about Ariel and Eric. Please continue writing this. I would love to see what happens. : ) Wow another reader - thanks - now i have 3, yeah i also love fanfics about Ariel & Eric, that is why im writing one. Yeah i think i will be writing more tonight when i get home from work - if im not too tired!!!!
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Post by ariel7angel on Oct 6, 2006 14:23:18 GMT -5
AFter the wonderful dance with her handsome husband Ariel went around to all the tables and said a few words to her new people, so many names she knew she wouldnt be able to remember them all, but that is what she had Eric & Shie for, to help her remember. After she was done with the boring part of the evening - she heard her favorite song, it was the song that she and Eric had danced to the 2nd day the were together. Once Eric hear it, he knew that his lovely wife would want to dance, so he drop everything and everyone he was talking to and when over to her.
"I know you know who song this is, dont you sweetie." Eric knew he didnt have to ask, but he loved too.
"Of course i do, its our song" Ariel just love this song with all her heart.
"Well would you like to dance, my sweet."
"I thought you would never ask"
With that he took her hand, and leader to the dance floor, while Shie & Ryan, both knowing what song this was, cleared the floor for the royal dance. They all knew that they would want to dance alone just like they had done that great afternoon.
NO one was more beautiful than Ariel with her pretty red hair and beautiful pink dress, and Eric danced so strong and proud. That no one could keep their eyes off her, which now Ariel knew everyone was looking at them, but she could still feel those eyes - they had never left her, which creep her out, but she didnt care, this was there song, and she knew that Eric would never let anything happen to her.
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I know that its not much, but i have to leave for work in like 7 mins, so i will finish when i get home, please comment.
Thanks
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