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Post by miklc on Nov 14, 2006 16:09:30 GMT -5
It's alright *glitterfish* carn't wait to see how this will turn out
"Well you'll just have to wait and see, won't you?" She giggled, observing the anticpicpation on her friend's face. "BOO," came the familiar voice from behind Flounder, the little fish jumped in fright. "Urchin!" Ariel gasped.
Hope this is OK carn't wait to see what other people come up with[/color]
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Post by miklc on Nov 13, 2006 16:00:39 GMT -5
Hi *glitterfish* this is a great idea, so basically are we writing a Thanksgiving themed Little Mermaid Story together (If that's wrong just tell me)? We did one of these for Ariel's 16th Birthday, and I really enjoyed doing it.
"Hey Ariel," Flounder said nervously, attempting to hide something from Ariel, unsucessfully. ""Hi Flounder, what's that your hiding from me? Let me see," Ariel enquired.
BTW I just think prehaps that this thread would be better suited in the Fan Fiction section of the Forum.
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Post by miklc on Nov 16, 2006 14:27:57 GMT -5
Wow that was amazing WickedElphie I love your style of writing, it's so mesmerising
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Post by miklc on Nov 16, 2006 13:40:05 GMT -5
My List:
(Place) Ariel's Grotto (Thing/Plural/Food) Dinglehopper (Place) Atlantica (Verb) Swimming (Thing) Shell (Person/TLM Character) Alana (Adj.) Beautiful (Verb) Singing (Adj.) Ugly (Thing/Scenery) Seaweed (Adj.) Happy
Ariel went out one day to the Ariel's Grotto, and decided to pick up some Dinglehopper. She was wandering around and came across Atlantica. Then, after leaving she ended up Swimming into a Shell! Alana came in and rescued her from a beautiful turmoil! Together they skipped and singing into a ugly seaweed! They lived happy ever after!! The End!!
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Post by miklc on Oct 23, 2006 5:40:24 GMT -5
That's really cool
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Post by miklc on Oct 21, 2006 13:09:17 GMT -5
Finally I got Chapter 1 completed it's kind of rubbish, but I would love to hear you're comments still please. I havn't yet got a title for my fanfic, but I will be adding one later on
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Post by miklc on Oct 16, 2006 12:50:06 GMT -5
I am really sorry that I havn't even finished Chapter 1 yet I have been so busy with school and everything else, I will really try and get it completed as soon as possible oh an thanks for any one's comments, they are well appreciated
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Post by miklc on Oct 9, 2006 12:24:16 GMT -5
Well I know it has been quite along time since I wrote the Prolouge, but I have been really busy with school work and Disney On Ice , but not to worry I havn't left it, for those who would like to read the first chapter of my first fanfic. So here it is....... Chapter 1 Excitment bubbled through the busy streets of Atlantica. King Triton's golden castle stood glorious and proud, above the rest of the city. Vibrant aquatic plants flowed gently in the crystal waters, as school's of fish frolicked to and fro peacefully. The many species provided an explosion of colour and beauty, anyone that was to witness such an alluring scene would be lost for words.
Yet today knowone could stop to watch such a glorious scene, it seemed. Their minds were focused on a prior engagement. Something so special, many thought it to be the most important event of the year. It was to week until the annual Coral Ball, that was to be held in Trition's castle, in celebration of the whole ocean. It was tradition, it always had been and it alwys would be.
Merpeople off all ages swam around hurringly, there was so much to prepare for. Adolescent mermaids fought over what to wear, while merman compitited against each other to see whom they could takeas thier date. All was panic and frustration for the older merpeople whom also took it upon themselves to do most of the preparation. That was the way it had been for generations.
"Girls, girls stop dis rif raf immediately. We have a concert to prepare for," demanded Triton's musical composer, Sebastian. Sebastian the crab was very proud of his royal title, yet it had occured to him that most of the time all he did was chase after Triton's own daughters. "Oh but Sebastian how can we calm down? We've been waiting a whole year for this to arrive, isn't it so exciting?" laughed Alana, one of the King's beatiful daughter.
All together there were seven princesses, each gifted with harmonic voices. Yet the youngest of the sister had the most delightful voice. "Arielle! Arielle! Where is dat girl?" Sebastian questionned. The problem was she always seemed to turn up late at the most annoying of times. "Trust dat girl, to turn up late one of di most important rehersals of her life," Sebastian sighed.
"I'm here," startled Sebastian turned around, Triton's youngest daughter was swimming towards him. Her beautiful red hair flowed in the water, as her stunning green tail shimmered in the water. "Where exactly have you been, young lady. Late again," Sebastian questionned sternelly. He could act angrily on the outside, though he heart was jumping for joy on the inside. The rhersal could go on afterall. "If your Father knew you were late for another preformance he'd ..." "Sebastian I'm here now, it won't happen again," Ariel promised, though Sebastian didn't seem to belive her.
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Post by miklc on Oct 7, 2006 4:30:02 GMT -5
Thank you very much that means alot :-)
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Post by miklc on Oct 6, 2006 15:40:22 GMT -5
Well I have been wanting to write a fanfic for a long time now. When I am older apart from working in animation, I would love to be a Fantasy Author. So I would be really really grateful for all your comments, good and bad. Tell me what you REALLY think, I know I am quite bad, but practise make perfect. Now due to school work I won't be able to add to this as regulary as some people do but please do keep checking back. Oh and I also have a kind of ruff idea where I want to go with this, but other than that nothing so anything could really happen (PS I will give this thread a proper name, when I actually think of one) PrologueThe moonlight shone down brightly, on the calm surface of the water as the waves lapped gently against the seaweed drenched rocks. There she was perched upon one of these rocks, sitting deep in thought. He beatiful long hair hung down past her waist, flowing gently in the evening breeze. The lights of a far off ship, could just be made out on the horizon. Aboard that ship would be humans, creatures with two tails whom could not survive the wonders of the ocean. Suddenly this delicate creature broke into song. She sang of the wonders she had experianced, the pain she had caused and the furtures that lay ahead. Then with little hesitation she dived into the water. Resurfacing only once more, before returing to her watery domain.So it is only the prologue, but I would love to here what you guys think of it
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Post by miklc on Nov 13, 2006 15:38:47 GMT -5
That's really good nachonaco well done
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Post by miklc on Oct 12, 2006 6:51:49 GMT -5
OK cool
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Post by miklc on Oct 11, 2006 13:58:03 GMT -5
Are you going to post it???
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Post by miklc on Oct 5, 2006 14:39:14 GMT -5
Yer I think that would be a really good idea, just one question and this is really stupid what is a parody? plz HELP I've herd of them a few times but actually never found out what was one be4. But anyway yer post it
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Post by miklc on Mar 8, 2007 15:14:19 GMT -5
This is great in this short extract you've already added more suspense!!! Oh ideas hrm.... sorry I carn't really think of any at the mo
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Post by miklc on Mar 7, 2007 13:37:59 GMT -5
Hi Lauren, Well it's been an awful while since I posted comments on your story, but I was finally able to read it from where I last left it, and I have to say WOW. It is really good, I loved Ariel's story though it was very sad at the ending and I carn't wait to see what happens with Ariel going back under the sea (BTW I am currently writing a FanFic of my own and Eric is going to become a merman in mine aswell! I guess great minds think alike lol) Ariel will be so happy, I wonder if Shie will get to go lol. Just want to say I LOVE it and write more soon because I want to know what's happening next, well done
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Post by miklc on Dec 11, 2006 13:03:37 GMT -5
Sorry I took so long commenting I havn't been round much lately, anyway this is brill carn't wait to hear more ariel7angel
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Post by miklc on Nov 12, 2006 8:35:36 GMT -5
It great, loving it and carn'r wait to read more
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Post by miklc on Nov 11, 2006 14:37:24 GMT -5
That's brill ariel7angel I carn't wait to here the rest myself lol
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Post by miklc on Nov 6, 2006 10:51:16 GMT -5
Wow ariel7angel that's brill well done keep it up
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